UC Essay Prompt #1 - Describe the world you come from ï for example, your family, community or school ï and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.
I don't really know how well I wrote this. Any helpful comments most appreciated :)
As far as I can remember, I have always had two supportive parents who provide everything I need; two younger brothers that do not permit loneliness within my life, and a grandmother who has never let me go a day without food. I have always lived comfortably and never had to worry about trying to find a better life elsewhere. However, for my parents, this was not the case. Both of my parents immigrated to America from South Korea and worked hard to conform into American society, a feat that proved to be rather difficult. Being the oldest of three first generation Americans in my family, I have realized that I should not take my parents' hard work for granted. Although we may not have the most extravagant lifestyle, my parents have always provided for my brothers and I; everything we have ever needed, my parents made sure we received it. This love has given me motivation to help others by showing them love as well.
In the future, I want to help people and make their lives, if not great, just a little brighter. It may come in the form of helping a loved one through an illness or giving them love when their circumstances have left them unable to receive it. I want to be able to say that I made a difference in somebody's life, no matter what country or age or economic status they have.
After I have completed my university experience, I want to travel the world and visit developing countries, and meanwhile try to understand how I can exact change for the world, for those left disadvantaged by their familial and economic circumstances. After I tour the world, I want to return here, to Southern California, and study medicine so I may provide relief to the people and places I visited. I have been given love since my birth, I believe it is time I spread that love to others.
I don't really know how well I wrote this. Any helpful comments most appreciated :)
As far as I can remember, I have always had two supportive parents who provide everything I need; two younger brothers that do not permit loneliness within my life, and a grandmother who has never let me go a day without food. I have always lived comfortably and never had to worry about trying to find a better life elsewhere. However, for my parents, this was not the case. Both of my parents immigrated to America from South Korea and worked hard to conform into American society, a feat that proved to be rather difficult. Being the oldest of three first generation Americans in my family, I have realized that I should not take my parents' hard work for granted. Although we may not have the most extravagant lifestyle, my parents have always provided for my brothers and I; everything we have ever needed, my parents made sure we received it. This love has given me motivation to help others by showing them love as well.
In the future, I want to help people and make their lives, if not great, just a little brighter. It may come in the form of helping a loved one through an illness or giving them love when their circumstances have left them unable to receive it. I want to be able to say that I made a difference in somebody's life, no matter what country or age or economic status they have.
After I have completed my university experience, I want to travel the world and visit developing countries, and meanwhile try to understand how I can exact change for the world, for those left disadvantaged by their familial and economic circumstances. After I tour the world, I want to return here, to Southern California, and study medicine so I may provide relief to the people and places I visited. I have been given love since my birth, I believe it is time I spread that love to others.