Hello! So this is my essay. I have rewritten plenty of times and would like some feedback on how my essay is. I am very stressed out about it because I am kind of a perfectionist and I can not seem to be happy with it so an feedback would be welcome and please be honest! The topic is this
A. Discuss how your family's experience or cultural history enriched you or presented you with opportunities or challenges in pursuing your educational goals.
OR
B. Tell us a story from your life, describing an experience that either demonstrates your character or helped to shape it.
I was born to parents who were not romantically involved with each other. I am a product of one single mistake made by them. My parents were both 19 when I was born because of this neither knew how to raise a child. My mother refused to let my father see me until he finally decided to take her to court. From their decision, I was thrown back and forth between my parents. I never seemed to have any stability in my life. My mother would move us from apartment to apartment, with a short-lived, bad boyfriend always accompanying her. School became the only consistent thing in my life, an escape that I found myself enjoying every day. In every class, I strove for the highest grades possible, hoping to make my parents proud, but all that changed in high school. My freshman year of high school I was living with my father because my mother did not want me to live with or see her anymore. He wanted me to focus on school full-time without any interruptions. He was always working overtime and the only time I really saw him was on the weekends. I learned that my school work is the most important thing I could worry about. The following year though, my mother wanted me back and this time made sure I would not see or talk to my father. She hates my father, but to this day I have no idea why. My mother always struggled with paying bills, so when my junior year in high school started I was working 30-35 hours each week, trying to balance my educational duties and the new obligation of helping pay the monthly bills. Suddenly, without the mention to anyone, my mother decided to move my sister and I away from everyone. At the time, I was still sick from a severe case of bronchitis and influenza. Having missed a massive amount of school work, the last thing I wanted was to leave the town I grew up in. I experienced many new things because of the move though. Without all the craziness I have endured, I would not of learned all the stuff I do today. I rely on myself to get what I want to achieve happen. I do not need constant reassurance and support from others because I believe in myself and that is what is important to me.
A. Discuss how your family's experience or cultural history enriched you or presented you with opportunities or challenges in pursuing your educational goals.
OR
B. Tell us a story from your life, describing an experience that either demonstrates your character or helped to shape it.
I was born to parents who were not romantically involved with each other. I am a product of one single mistake made by them. My parents were both 19 when I was born because of this neither knew how to raise a child. My mother refused to let my father see me until he finally decided to take her to court. From their decision, I was thrown back and forth between my parents. I never seemed to have any stability in my life. My mother would move us from apartment to apartment, with a short-lived, bad boyfriend always accompanying her. School became the only consistent thing in my life, an escape that I found myself enjoying every day. In every class, I strove for the highest grades possible, hoping to make my parents proud, but all that changed in high school. My freshman year of high school I was living with my father because my mother did not want me to live with or see her anymore. He wanted me to focus on school full-time without any interruptions. He was always working overtime and the only time I really saw him was on the weekends. I learned that my school work is the most important thing I could worry about. The following year though, my mother wanted me back and this time made sure I would not see or talk to my father. She hates my father, but to this day I have no idea why. My mother always struggled with paying bills, so when my junior year in high school started I was working 30-35 hours each week, trying to balance my educational duties and the new obligation of helping pay the monthly bills. Suddenly, without the mention to anyone, my mother decided to move my sister and I away from everyone. At the time, I was still sick from a severe case of bronchitis and influenza. Having missed a massive amount of school work, the last thing I wanted was to leave the town I grew up in. I experienced many new things because of the move though. Without all the craziness I have endured, I would not of learned all the stuff I do today. I rely on myself to get what I want to achieve happen. I do not need constant reassurance and support from others because I believe in myself and that is what is important to me.
