A passion for reading, writing, and science - MIT short essay

1. We know you lead a busy life, full of activities, many of which are required of you. Tell us about something you do for the pleasure of it. (*)(100 words or fewer)

Despite my strong attraction towards science, I have also developed a passion for reading and writing.

I like to read. To write. To experience the thrills of vicarious adventure through works of fiction. To put form into my ideas and imaginations . I often find myself immersed in thoughts, thinking about either a poem, a story, or just a short, insightful sentence. On other occasions, I may opt to wander inside the various worlds contained in my books, or translating my favorite short shories from Japanese to English.

Reading and writing are simply my way of relaxing and enjoying myself.

This essay is exactly 100 words. Phew. May I have some comments, please? Thank you very much!

You use the full stops to create sentences way too frequently. Adjust this.

You also do not discuss your passion in any relevant detail.

Needs work

Yah, that's the problem -- no detail. This could be written by anybody who likes to read. Many college applicants like to read. This doesn't distinguish you from the crowd at all. What do you like to read? What do you like to write? How has this passion affected you?

I see now that I should be including details. How silly of me lol. Thanks! I'll do a rewrite and post it soon.