TOPIC:
Describe a meaningful event, experience or accomplishment in your life and how it will affect your college experience or your contribution to the UF campus community. You may want to reflect on your family, your school or community activities, or your involvement in areas outside of school.
-I need help editing and shortening the esay so it stays within the 500 word range.
THANKS ALOT! :)))
MY ESSAY:
There have been many influences and experiences throughout my 17 years of life that have affected the person I am today and more importantly, the person I strive to be in the future. I feel that these experiences will contribute and affect my involvement at the University of Florida.
The biggest passion in my life has been the sport of basketball.
My passion for the game began during my last year of middle school, but despite trying out for the middle school team I was not chosen to be a part of it. Although this was of great disappointment to me, it did not deter me from my love of the game. It made me more driven and determined to work hard during the summer prior to entering high school to ensure that I was in a position to try-out for the high school freshman team. I practiced morning, noon and night in 90 degree heat, perfecting my shot and working out to improve my skills. This hard work paid off, when I was chosen to be a part of the freshman team and I have continued to work hard during my highschool years to be an asset to the varsity team today.
I feel sure that this experience of being a part of the high school basketball team has helped me become successful in my academic life. Being part of a team has instilled in me the responsibilities and work ethic that carries over into other aspects of my life and I feel sure that this will be extremely valuable in my future endeavors at the University of Florida.
Although the above experience and accomplishment of being chosen to be a part of a team has contributed and shaped the person I am today, a more recent and meaningful event has had a great affect on the person I hope to be in the future. This event involves my family and more importantly, my parents becoming United States Citizens.
My parents are originally from England and immigrated to America 24 years ago. They gave up their family and friends in England in the hopes of a better life in America. It was very moving to witness them being sworn in and taking the Oath of Allegiance that day, as not only was it their Citizenship that was granted that day, but it was also the day that I became an American Citizen because I was also born in England. It made me realize the many sacrifices that my parents have made to come over to America, in the hopes of achieving the "American Dream".
The "American Dream" is not easy to achieve and it not something that comes handed out on a silver platter, it requires years of determination and perseverance. I realize that my parents have worked extremely hard to provide a better life for my sister and I. I look forward to making my parents very proud of my achievements and to realize that their sacrifices were worth it to see me graduate college and reach my full potential in life.
I am very motivated to take advantage of the opportunities offered at University of Florida and believe that the above experiences will help me in fulfilling my "American Dream".
Describe a meaningful event, experience or accomplishment in your life and how it will affect your college experience or your contribution to the UF campus community. You may want to reflect on your family, your school or community activities, or your involvement in areas outside of school.
-I need help editing and shortening the esay so it stays within the 500 word range.
THANKS ALOT! :)))
MY ESSAY:
There have been many influences and experiences throughout my 17 years of life that have affected the person I am today and more importantly, the person I strive to be in the future. I feel that these experiences will contribute and affect my involvement at the University of Florida.
The biggest passion in my life has been the sport of basketball.
My passion for the game began during my last year of middle school, but despite trying out for the middle school team I was not chosen to be a part of it. Although this was of great disappointment to me, it did not deter me from my love of the game. It made me more driven and determined to work hard during the summer prior to entering high school to ensure that I was in a position to try-out for the high school freshman team. I practiced morning, noon and night in 90 degree heat, perfecting my shot and working out to improve my skills. This hard work paid off, when I was chosen to be a part of the freshman team and I have continued to work hard during my highschool years to be an asset to the varsity team today.
I feel sure that this experience of being a part of the high school basketball team has helped me become successful in my academic life. Being part of a team has instilled in me the responsibilities and work ethic that carries over into other aspects of my life and I feel sure that this will be extremely valuable in my future endeavors at the University of Florida.
Although the above experience and accomplishment of being chosen to be a part of a team has contributed and shaped the person I am today, a more recent and meaningful event has had a great affect on the person I hope to be in the future. This event involves my family and more importantly, my parents becoming United States Citizens.
My parents are originally from England and immigrated to America 24 years ago. They gave up their family and friends in England in the hopes of a better life in America. It was very moving to witness them being sworn in and taking the Oath of Allegiance that day, as not only was it their Citizenship that was granted that day, but it was also the day that I became an American Citizen because I was also born in England. It made me realize the many sacrifices that my parents have made to come over to America, in the hopes of achieving the "American Dream".
The "American Dream" is not easy to achieve and it not something that comes handed out on a silver platter, it requires years of determination and perseverance. I realize that my parents have worked extremely hard to provide a better life for my sister and I. I look forward to making my parents very proud of my achievements and to realize that their sacrifices were worth it to see me graduate college and reach my full potential in life.
I am very motivated to take advantage of the opportunities offered at University of Florida and believe that the above experiences will help me in fulfilling my "American Dream".