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In the past, sporting champions used to be motivated primarily by the desire to win



Real Fog 5 / 26  
May 4, 2011   #1
In the past, sporting champions used to be motivated primarily by the desire to win the match or to break world records. These days, they are more likely to be motivated by the prize money and the opportunity to be famous.

What message does this send to young people and how does this attitude to sport affect the sports themselves.
Basically, sporting competitions are held in order to find champions who will commit numerous breakthroughs to gain some pride and stay the best in a particular field. Currently, however, huge amount of wage and limelight have become key factors which influence champions to succeed in competitions. Consequently, young people are considering sport as a tool to be famous and its main role is disappearing.

I have an impression that the main aim in doing sport activities is to compete with the opponents and achieve a target. Nowadays, however, these believes have changed significantly and many famous sports people are making money as well as fame on it, which will leave coming generations in misunderstandings of its basic functions. Subsequently, young people will find it as a tool to make a living on it, not to benefit from the emotional gain that sport offers. Moreover, it will not keep tension between nations unless we consider sport as a pure activity, not a way to make a fortune.

I believe that unless celebrities keep on using sport in a true way, not only the status of sport will diminish in the world, but those champions will soon become dolls for media. They will be appreciated, for instance, for appearance on cover of magazines, whereas they are supposed to be admired for the achievements in terms of sports. Furthermore, they will stop developing, because they have enormous salaries, which make them satisfied with their lives.

All in all, I think we should not forget about the irreplaceable advantages of sport to the globe and, therefore, must not consider it as a tool to gain attention. Besides, it is a duty for us to keep the traditions in safety and bring them to next generation without dreadful changes.

Frank zhao 5 / 10  
May 4, 2011   #2
Dear Real Fog
You have very good points and controlling idea and it could be better if you add some specific examples to support your idea.

Regards,
Frank
OP Real Fog 5 / 26  
May 4, 2011   #3
Thank you =) I forgot about the evidences.
OP Real Fog 5 / 26  
May 6, 2011   #4
Any feedback ? ?
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
May 6, 2011   #5
Use "a" here:
Currently, however, a huge amount of...

wage and limelight issues have become key factors which influence champions to succeed in competitions.

Consequently, young people are considering sport as a tool to be famous and its main role purpose is being undermined. is disappearing.

I have an impression that the main aim in doing sport activities is to compete with the opponents and achieve a target goal.

Nowadays, however, these believes beliefs have changed significantly and...

I believe that unless celebrities keep on using sport in a true way, not only will the status of sports diminish in the world, but also those champions will...

Nice job! I agree with your argument. :-)


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