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"about pen coats!" - extracurricular activities Common short



lizziezhou 6 / 16  
Dec 26, 2010   #1
Any advice on the content, style, diction, grammar, deletion (now 198) is welcomed!!!! THX!
I am not sure if the topic is too weird, but that's exactly what I did in the past two years.

Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (150 words or fewer)

"Anyone has used pen coats? Give me please!" People called me a learned rubbish collector because I gathered pen coats from my classmates every Friday afternoon in case they threw away at homes. From a young age, I have realized that daily accumulation amounted to unpredictable, striking consequence. Five or six pen coats at a time, this activity continued for over a year, and the initial box to contain my harvest evolved into a middle-sized carton. Usually after classifying them according to brands, I started walking to some patients' houses I met in mother's hospital to distribute my collection, or to local stores whose proprietors cared about budget. Refills alone, therefore, could satisfy their needs. I was not turning this project into an experiment of future financial independence. The core of whole consideration was plastic preservation. It is equally important as saving water, but few ever really taken seriously, not to mention noticing the smallest part-pen coats. Every time I saw mounds of pen coats at home, not only did I reflect stories that accompanied some of them, but also felt ineffable content and courage as what I had done would surely influence my life style in future.

littlechef 10 / 33  
Dec 26, 2010   #2
"in case they threw some away at their homes.

but I also felt ineffable content

lifestyle is one word
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Jan 7, 2011   #3
"Has anyone u sed pen coats? Give them to me please!" People called me a learned rubbish collector because I gathered pen coats from my classmates every Friday afternoon in case they threw would be thrown away at home.

From a young age, I have realized that daily accumulation amounted to unpredictable, striking consequence.---This is a great sentence!!

When you thoughtfully consider something, that is reflecting on it. When you act in a way that shows sensibility, your actions reflect sensibility. So that is 2 different meanings, and it depends on if you say "reflect" or "reflect on." ---> Every time I saw mounds of pen coats at home, not only did I reflect on stories that accompanied some of them, but I also felt ineffable contentment and courage as what I had done would surely influence my lifestyle in future.

You are great!! This is a meaningful accomplishment.


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