Florida State University
By looking at a person's values one can see how that person will live their life. If someone lives a life of procrastination, that person will not achieve his or her goals. A person's values are their core beliefs. If their core beliefs are corrupt, their journey through life will be blurred and difficult. "Vires" and "artes are two Latin words that can describe my beliefs.
Vires symbolizes a variety of strengths- moral, physical, and intellectual. Having morals in my life is one of my strengths. Since I was a child, I have prioritized a list of things most important to me such as family, school, and prior obligations that I was committed to accomplishing. For example, in eighth grade, I had the chance to attend the Engineering and Manufacturing Institute of Technology program, but the high school that this program was at was out of my school zone. I would have to sacrifice attending high school with my best friends to go to a place where I did not know anyone, but this was a great opportunity that I could not relinquish to my social status. I knew I made the right decision, because for me an education is more important than a social life.
I also work at improving my physical strength. I am a four-time varsity wrestler, so it is imperative that I follow a dynamic exercise schedule so that my body can perform at an optimum level. To keep up with my competition I train my body to work twice as hard and twice as long. Training like this, I am able to wrestle my opponent with an advantageous amount of energy.
While I have no doubts concerning my intelligence, I do have to put forth more effort in this area than I would in my physical or moral strengths. I was diagnosed with Attention Deficit Disorder when I was nine years old, but I have never let a disability slow me down. Through persistence and commitment, I keep my G.P.A. up while enrolled in several rigorous classes such as honors and AP courses.
Artes is a remarkable word; it signifies the beauty of intellectual pursuits exemplified in skills, crafts, or arts. Being in a varsity sport for so long has taught me life lessons like keeping my composure under pressure. In wrestling, you are in a battle with your opponent for six minutes. In that time, you must execute flawless skill and technique to be successful in beating your opponent. If I make mistakes in the final moments of the match I have to remain calm and collective, knowing I can make up for that loss without panicking or losing my composure.
My values are important to me. The difference in peoples' morals makes us unique and outstanding, for better or worse. Without these beliefs, society would be filled with ungoverned citizens, all the same, fading into away nothingness. I refuse to fade away. I am separate from others by my values; I am unique.
Good morning.
I agree with the above comment, and have a few others as well:
Make sure you are properly capitalizing all proper nouns. For instance, artes should be "Artes." The flip side to this is make sure that you are not capitalizing words that are not proper nouns or the beginning of sentences.
Your conclusion doesn't fit the essay very well; it is a good conclusion, but it should wrap up the virtues you wrote about in the paper. Uniqueness was not one of the virtues included in the prompt.
I do think you used good examples, and with a little bit of clean up the essay will be great.
Regards,
Gloria
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