"the photography editor" - Common App- One of your activites

Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (150 words or fewer).

I feel that I have benefited greatly from my experiences as the photography editor for the (my schools) yearbook. As an editor I had to work with my team to keep them motivated toward a common goal, which was to create a two hundred and thirty page yearbook in eight months. This challenge instilled team values and leadership skills in me while I faced the daily tasks that came with being a leader. In the midst of this, I discovered my passion for leading a journalism team. I am now able to go into college confident about my chosen major and career path of journalism and communication studies.

I've counted that you wrote 108 words. Since you can write 40 words more, maybe you should detail more some part of your leadership experience. Maybe some specific conflict that you were able to solve.

Anyhow, it's very well written, I really liked it! Good luck!

I feel that I have benefited greatly from my experiences I want to cut out all this because it does not really carry any meaning.

As the photography editor for the (my schools) yearbook, I had to work with my team to keep them motivated...

while I faced the daily tasks that came with being a leader, including ______, ________, and _________. In the midst of this, I discovered my ...

:-)

I feel that I have benefited greatly from my experiences as the photography editor for the (my schools) yearbook. This is kinda restating the prompt. If you show, you won't need to tell :)

As a photography editor for my school's yearbook I had to work with my team to keep them motivated toward a common goal: , which was to create a two hundred and thirty page yearbook in eight months. This challenge instilled team values and leadership skills in me while I faced the daily tasks that came with being a leader.

(Okay, this is once again telling rather than showing. What kind of team values? What kind of leadership skills? That's so broad. Give more specific and personal examples.)

In the midst of this, I discovered my passion for leading a journalism team.
(Please don't say "passion" so easily. So many people toss it around and I haven't seen the rest of your vague essay reflect a passion more than...well, an experience or interest.)

I am now able to go into college confident about my chosen major and career path of journalism and communication studies.
(This is once again a little bland in my opinion but you can keep it if you want. Just remember that you want to give them a good personal impression of you and they can already see what your chosen major is in your common app! Don't waste room if you can help it, every word is precious )