"a place where I can grow" - Boston University, what to accomplish?

Essay #1: Given what you know about Boston University, what do you hope to accomplish as an undergraduate here? Please respond in an essay of no more than 500 words.

---Please critique my essay...don't mind if its harsh..wrote in like 25min

As an undergraduate freshman, my biggest zeal is to have an unforgettable college experience. I choose Boston University as one of my dream destinations because life not only inside, but outside the university holds new experiences and challenges that will certainly captivate me. Inside the university, I can become a part of a community of people that all exhibit exceptional scholar and personality. Boston University is a place where I can grow, learn and define myself through interactions with the people and opportunities that surround me. The friends I make and the bonds that develop will last a lifetime because those are the essential sentiments and values of life that can never be forgotten. But, why stop there; outside the university is a magnificent city waiting for me to explore. The culture from the east to the west is sure to change, and I want to explore every side of it. I feel that a change in environment would best benefit me because of my personality. I am the type of person that likes to stretch my legs and arms a little here and a little there; I like to get a taste of the whole lot because it is new and exciting. I believe becoming a part of this cohesive community and atmosphere will help me to accomplish my own personal and educational goals. From wherever I stand, Boston University seems to be the whole package: a great education, a wonderful environment to grow and make friends, and overall a place where I just feel right.

This is pretty good, but the reason they ask this question is so that they can find out more about you as a person, so you should talk about the aspects of BU that relate to YOU as a person. A lot of the words are pretty general, so you should try using more specific language.

good luck!

I agree with Sage, in this essay, you can replace the "Boston University" with almost any university in a city. Such as NYU, northeastern, etc.

Include why it is unique. and then why it is unique to you.

Ohhh i see, thank you very much for the advice =D

Yeah, I agree with all of the posters. Try and mention some specific reason why BU as a university, appeals to you more than other similar universities. If you have time, please critique my JHU short answer essay.

I think you should do some research and mention some of BU special program.

Hi, I think it would be better if you wrote more about what you want to accomplish in Boston, not why you chose Boston. I think they want to know your future plans; how you are confident in your choose and that you have a point to be there and to be a part of their community. They want to see you will bring to Boston University as an undergraduate student.

Hope it's not harsh.
But, I am also applying there and I have a friend studying there. She advised this to me.

Good luck

Mention your plans in BU,
you could also talk about your plans after college, such as masters, ph.d, or even what kind of life you want to lead.
Good luck