THE life-changing OPPORTUNITY
Entering the University of ....... with the ......... Scholarship would be life-changing for me. However, if I am not awarded with said scholarship, I am planning to continue my undergraduate studies at the University of Padjajaran in Indonesia. As a senior student, my friends and I are currently taking extra courses in school as a preparation to take tests to enter our chosen university. To balance it all out, I would love to explore Indonesia. It has always been a dream of mine to see the sunrise from Mount Bromo in East Java.
Please give some feedbacks on my essay. Thank you in advance! ^-^I dont know who changed what I wrote there, but the question for the essay is " if you are not awarded with the scholarship, what are your plans in the next four years? (100 max)