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"I played around with my computer" NYU - Poly Supplement short questions



ashyy1992 4 / 4  
Jan 8, 2010   #1
Hello everyone, I have completed my NYU-Poly supplement and I would like anyone reading this post to help me edit my short answer questions (everything is near or at 500 characters) Thank you!

If you could spend one day in New York City with a famous inventor, who would you like it to be, where would you go, and why?

I choose Thomas Edison because he improved the idea of a light bulb and reinvented it. His version of the light bulb was the most sophisticated because it included all three major elements that left his competition in dust. Since I know New York City both inside and out, I would first blindfold him and then remove it when we arrive at Times Square. He would be awed by the numerous lights and how technology has improved since 1879. There is someone who always wants to improve an existing idea.

Tell us why you selected your major or your area of interest.

My major is Computer Engineering. I selected this major because of my ardor for computers. Everyone comes to me for any tech related help and some ask me, "How come you know so much about computers?" My reply is, "I played around with my computer." I want to become a Computer Engineer since I want to learn more about computers, inside and out. The compliments of my friends and also my own fervor for computers inspired me to pursue my career as a Computer Engineer.

Why do you want to attend NYU-Poly?

I want to attend NYU-Poly because I would be receiving an excellent education not too far from my home. NYU-Poly will be a challenge for many students but I know that I am ready because of my experience with computers. I am more than prepared to succeed because of my experience in college level work in The Brooklyn Latin School. I believe that my transition into NYU-Poly will be as smooth as possible because I am prepared and anxious to start college in the Fall.

EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Jan 16, 2010   #2
because he improved the idea of a light bulb and reinvented it.

I don't think this is a reason for choosing him. I think it is a description of his work. What is your real reason for choosing him?

I think it is supposed to be like this:
There is always someone who always wants to improve an existing idea.

My major is Computer Engineering. I selected this major because of my ardor for computers. I think the second part would be better without these two sentences. They weigh it down. It is so nice if you start the essay with action:

Everyone comes to me for any tech related help and some ask me, "How come you know so much about computers?"

:-)


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