I always prefer to be an effective leader instead of being a neutral member!

I always prefer to be an effective leader instead of being a neutral member. I am always ready to accept responsibility I have always been eager to be the leader of a group. "------------------" program would pave the way for me ,to achieve my dream ,by providing the good educational opportunity for been a real and active leader in my society ,and to other aspects of life as well which I cannot achieve without an accredited degree as well as high-quality education(which might not be available in my country) I believe the----------------- would represent the best environment to bring this to an excellent result of learning, community service and global awareness the common factors to be a good and successful leader, therefore I would get the chance to show my capacity , Also potential of playing a leading role at the university in which my academic life and then the community that I will to be living in , In particular by participating in the social and the political life at that university through the different community-service ,participating in University clubs , and mixing with student from a divert countries and different cultures even getting involved in volunteering actives and internship which is a vital feature in this scholarship program , , I want a chance to work in this side when I go back home. After I get my college degree, I hope to promote ,encourage and motivate ----------- student to the "---------------" experience to who might get to apply for this impressive program especially the idea of interacting and involving in the society and help my country in the best way as possible

 

Well done! However I have some suggestions, minor . I always prefer to be an effective leader rather than being a neutral member. I am always ready to accept responsibility I have always been eager to be the leader of a group. It is primary importance for me to be responsible and active group leader. "------------------" program would pave the way for me ,to achieve my dream - I'd rather used more official style "----" program allow to fulfill my goal and so on. I didn't find a full stop. Did you confuse them with comma?

However you essay is strong, good range vocabulary!!