Hey all, I need some feedback on this MIT essay... I'm not quite sure if this is 'creative' enough (especially for people in other countries). please be as harsh as you can!
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Tell us about a time you used your creativity. This could be something you made, a project that you led, an idea that you came up with, or pretty much anything else. (*) (200-250 words)
"We can't have a prom night," I said to the Prom committee members. "The Headmaster said that we should have a prom day instead, in the school area, with all parents in attendance, and all graduating students should wear uniforms."
"It's not a prom!" They whined, the graduating students whined, but the Headmaster remained steadfast.
As we tried to brainstorm on a theme to suit our conditions, I suddenly had an idea to make an award-themed prom, with some performances jammed between awards. We could put black fabric along the school hall's windows to make it dark. Only students who performed or read nominations should wear fancy clothes. This way, the uniform requirement wouldn't make the event less 'cool'. We also didn't need large space, something we didn't have, for dance or games.
Other committee members liked this idea. So we started to choose categories and nominees, then distributed ballots to every graduating student. After being counted by teachers, vote results were written in closed parchments. We also bought personalized, statue-like trophies and commissioned an art institute graduate to film videos on the nominees.
The D-Day turned out to be a blast; complains that we heard up to the previous night were gone. My friends patted me in the back and complimented me, but my biggest compliment came from the Headmaster herself, who said that this was the best graduation ever in her thirty years of career.
After all, It is not about the chance we have, but how we make use of that chance.
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Tell us about a time you used your creativity. This could be something you made, a project that you led, an idea that you came up with, or pretty much anything else. (*) (200-250 words)
"We can't have a prom night," I said to the Prom committee members. "The Headmaster said that we should have a prom day instead, in the school area, with all parents in attendance, and all graduating students should wear uniforms."
"It's not a prom!" They whined, the graduating students whined, but the Headmaster remained steadfast.
As we tried to brainstorm on a theme to suit our conditions, I suddenly had an idea to make an award-themed prom, with some performances jammed between awards. We could put black fabric along the school hall's windows to make it dark. Only students who performed or read nominations should wear fancy clothes. This way, the uniform requirement wouldn't make the event less 'cool'. We also didn't need large space, something we didn't have, for dance or games.
Other committee members liked this idea. So we started to choose categories and nominees, then distributed ballots to every graduating student. After being counted by teachers, vote results were written in closed parchments. We also bought personalized, statue-like trophies and commissioned an art institute graduate to film videos on the nominees.
The D-Day turned out to be a blast; complains that we heard up to the previous night were gone. My friends patted me in the back and complimented me, but my biggest compliment came from the Headmaster herself, who said that this was the best graduation ever in her thirty years of career.
After all, It is not about the chance we have, but how we make use of that chance.
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