'Public Speaking' - MIT busy life / Activity for pleasure

I have to write an essay for MIT on the following prompt: We know you lead a busy life, full of activities, many of which are required of you. Tell us about something you do for the pleasure of it. (*)(100 words or fewer). The essay is due by January 1st.

Any Feedback would be GREATLY appreciated, as well as possible ways to shorten down the essay to fit the word count!!

Thanks!!

Public Speaking is an activity that I pursue, not because I have to, but because I want to. Whether it's at church saying prayers or on the basketball court motivating our team to stay in the game, public speaking is an activity that I do for the pleasure of it. Rather than sleeping in during the weekend, I am up bright and early to research and practice for speech and debate competitions. Finding time to write and memorize a 13 minute persuasive speech and research both sides of a political topic is difficult to obtain, especially with a Full IB schedule. However, sacrificing activities, such as sleeping in on Saturday morning's, is an activity I'm willing to give up to pursue my passion for Public Speaking.

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First off, as an applicant to the same school I wish you good luck.

My advice:

1. public speaking is an activity that I do for the pleasure of it
I recommend not to repeat something out of the essay prompt since it's not very creative.
In addition, you have already said it with "not because I have to, but because I want to.", which actually
should be something stronger like "because I love it"
2.Again repetition with "sleeping in on Saturday morning's", which I would not list as an activity that you give up. (It makes you sound lazy)

3. Try to descrie what you exactly like about public speaking:
for example something like "All my efforts are rewarded when I experience the thrill of speaking and getting applause from people I have never seen before.

or "I simply love the intellectual exercise and the open-mindedness you get from considering a thing from different perspectives"

Hope I could help

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I agree that you should avoid repeating the sleeping in on Saturday morning comment. Also, I think you should more about WHY you like public speaking. Other than that, its great.