Your reasons for applying to the University of Waterloo; my interest in computer engineering

REASONS FOR CHOOSING YOUR PROGRAM AND WATERLOO

Please tell us about your educational goals, your interest in your chosen program(s), and your reasons for applying to the University of Waterloo. If you have applied to more than one program, please discuss your interest in each program(900 character limit)

I was in 10th grade when I was introduced to the wonderful world of computer engineering. I was selected to represent my school team in the National Robotics Olympiad - 2017. We had to build and program a robot to collect coloured blocks and place them in their designated location. This sparked my interest in computer engineering.

This experience led me to working on various Arduino projects - from simple projects like fingerprint door lock to more complex ones like oil and gas surveillance drone.

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# This is a rough draft. I have only begun. I have to still answer the question of " your reasons for applying to waterloo" and also about " your educational goals".

# English is not my first language, so I have some difficulties.

# Edit: Please help me answering these questions:

1. Your reasons for applying to waterloo
2. Your educational goals.

Thank you!

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This experience ... - from simple projects like fingerprint door locks to more complex ones like oil and gas surveillance drones.