Hi,
I am not sure if the WHY Duke part is enough, I tried to approach it in a different way.
Be harsh if necessary.
And Thank you for your help.
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If you are applying to the Pratt School of Engineering, please discuss why you want to study engineering and why you would like to study at Duke.
From Lego pieces to remote-control cars to iPods and computers, I grew up surrounded by technology. As a boy, I was fascinated by gadgets and gizmos. As a teenager, I still have an affinity with that childhood penchant. Of course, my curiosity in how-things-work is just a fraction of my interest in engineering. Being the critical thinker that I am, I have spent time speculating the affects of technology and the growth of it. I notice the social impact each innovation has; I am, truly, fascinated to see people use their cell phones as credit cards or boarding passes -internet is a thing of the past! I am amazed by how each innovation can have a significant impact on the world. I wish to contribute to the movement of technology and the development of humankind. Basically, my drive for engineering comes from two sources, my inherent inclination to create innovations and my passion to improve living standards - through the creation of gadgets and gizmos - and make them more accessible to the rest of the world.
Besides the world acclaimed engineering programs and vast research opportunities at Duke, there is something special about Duke that draws my interest. It is the fact that Duke is, considerably, a much younger school compared to other well-known universities; there is so much room for growth. The students and faculty members at Duke recognize this and collaborate in order to make the best of Duke. In doing so, they create a communal sense that builds a strong community. For instance, different schools at Duke interact with each other to reach a common goal - unlike many great universities where different schools remain separate. In this sense, the community is exuberant. Duke is filled with life.
So it is no surprise that Pratt has over twenty-five student organizations. I was most intrigued by one club, Formula SAE Duke Motorsports - a group comprised of undergraduate students and graduate students. Duke Motorsports not only shares a common objective of excelling in the FSAE competitions but also has a common interest in participating public activities such as the Duke-Durham School Days program and the K-12 Engineering Outreach Initiative. Groups like the FSAE Duke Motorsports contribute back to Duke and are, in turn, what connects students at Duke with the community. I want to join this group to exercise my interests in engineering and engage in community activities that, collectively, bring Duke together. I will continue to grow, as a person, alongside Duke and I want to contribute to that growth. Together with other students at Duke, we will define new status quos, create new futures, and grow to discover who we are. There are many schools with world acclaimed engineering programs and there are several schools in which a community sense is present. But few institutions are able to achieve both at the same time: Duke does. And for this reason, Duke is my top choice.
I am not sure if the WHY Duke part is enough, I tried to approach it in a different way.
Be harsh if necessary.
And Thank you for your help.
______________________________________________________________________ ______________
If you are applying to the Pratt School of Engineering, please discuss why you want to study engineering and why you would like to study at Duke.
From Lego pieces to remote-control cars to iPods and computers, I grew up surrounded by technology. As a boy, I was fascinated by gadgets and gizmos. As a teenager, I still have an affinity with that childhood penchant. Of course, my curiosity in how-things-work is just a fraction of my interest in engineering. Being the critical thinker that I am, I have spent time speculating the affects of technology and the growth of it. I notice the social impact each innovation has; I am, truly, fascinated to see people use their cell phones as credit cards or boarding passes -internet is a thing of the past! I am amazed by how each innovation can have a significant impact on the world. I wish to contribute to the movement of technology and the development of humankind. Basically, my drive for engineering comes from two sources, my inherent inclination to create innovations and my passion to improve living standards - through the creation of gadgets and gizmos - and make them more accessible to the rest of the world.
Besides the world acclaimed engineering programs and vast research opportunities at Duke, there is something special about Duke that draws my interest. It is the fact that Duke is, considerably, a much younger school compared to other well-known universities; there is so much room for growth. The students and faculty members at Duke recognize this and collaborate in order to make the best of Duke. In doing so, they create a communal sense that builds a strong community. For instance, different schools at Duke interact with each other to reach a common goal - unlike many great universities where different schools remain separate. In this sense, the community is exuberant. Duke is filled with life.
So it is no surprise that Pratt has over twenty-five student organizations. I was most intrigued by one club, Formula SAE Duke Motorsports - a group comprised of undergraduate students and graduate students. Duke Motorsports not only shares a common objective of excelling in the FSAE competitions but also has a common interest in participating public activities such as the Duke-Durham School Days program and the K-12 Engineering Outreach Initiative. Groups like the FSAE Duke Motorsports contribute back to Duke and are, in turn, what connects students at Duke with the community. I want to join this group to exercise my interests in engineering and engage in community activities that, collectively, bring Duke together. I will continue to grow, as a person, alongside Duke and I want to contribute to that growth. Together with other students at Duke, we will define new status quos, create new futures, and grow to discover who we are. There are many schools with world acclaimed engineering programs and there are several schools in which a community sense is present. But few institutions are able to achieve both at the same time: Duke does. And for this reason, Duke is my top choice.
