Motivated, curious, thrill-seeking, jocular, competitive.
I am many things. Each trait that I possess contributes some to me, but the characteristic that shines through them all is my resiliency. However many failures, setbacks, or conflicts I find myself among, I always manage to find my way to the original path meant for me. It is impossible to describe with words in this limited space how much negative sentiment I have flowing through my body each time I get rejected from an audition, earn a grade that does not reflect the hours of effort I exert, or land in the middle of an argument with a close friend. The thought of giving up wrings me with its powerful grasp so strongly that there have been several instances where I was on the verge of throwing the gauntlet. As the old saying goes, "what doesn't kill you makes you stronger." To me, it is impossible to find a statement with greater truth behind it. I realize that each challenge I walk into, I emerge stronger and wiser, especially when the outcome does not work in my favor. My resiliency has saved me from a surely bleak outcome. When I reflect on my past with deep sincerity, I can't even begin to imagine all the moments of glory of music making I would have forgone if I had just said, with naive haste, "I quit". My iron will continues to burn brighter than ever, in anticipation for the inevitable challenges that lay ahead.
The word limit is 250 words. Please critique my essay and give me some tips. I'll gladly take a look at your essay.
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find myself among experience, I always manage to find ...
my way to the original path meant for me. It is impossible to describe with words in this limited space how much negative sentiment I have flowing through my body each time I get rejected from an ...
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As the old saying goes, "What doesn't kill you makes you stronger." To me, it is impossible to...
I think you go on for too long discussing resiliency, and that instead you should cut some of the discussion to make room for a paragraph about the importance of resiliancy in this program you choose or in the career you choose.
