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`Write a letter to your first-year roommate at Babson. Tell him or her what it will be like to live with you, why you chose Babson, and what you are looking forward to the most in college.
Dear Roommate,
First of all, let me congratulate you on being accepted into the prestigious Babson College. After fourteen years of school, we are about to begin a major new stage in our lives, in a place that we have desired to belong for a long time.
As roommates, we will live day by day, support each other in the good and bad moments and will experience this new cycle together; therefore, I should explain a little about myself. I was born in Costa Rica, where I grew up until February, 2010. Since there, I lived seven months in Israel where I learned about Zionism and Israeli culture, and then, I lived three months in Boston where I improved my English through an English course. I consider myself as someone persevering, helpful and sociable, always looking for new experiences and challenges. I love sports, music, spending time with friends and meeting new people mainly.
Since we are both going to start a new phase of our lives at Babson College, I imagine that for you as for me, this university can provide us with everything we are looking for this new stage. Choosing Babson College as my first choice was easy. Through my research about colleges, I realized that Babson's excellent economics program, the technological and amazing facilities that it brings to its students, the green fields that surround the campus, the support and love of its students to Babson and finally, its wide variety of people, having more than 20% of international undergraduates; were facts that could facilitate me to meet my goals and to have an incredible experience as a university student.
As a student of Babson College, I expect to prosper as a person, acquiring the necessary tools to be a well-educated person and be able to respond to circumstances that may arise. Furthermore, I would like to interact with other students, learn from their cultures, establish contacts that could serve for the future, participate in college activities, join study groups and organizations, and support the Beavers as a passionate sports fan that I am. I cannot leave behind its Student Abroad Program. I am convinced that in order to fulfill my expectations for these four years, I have to be part of this program. The change in culture one experiences makes a person grow in a way nothing else can. I would definitely benefit from it by gaining new and different experiences in universities that have arrangements with Babson College.
I am excited about starting college; I cannot wait more the moment to meet you and I hope we will have an incredible experience in our first year together at Babson.
Sincerely,
Henry Milgram
`Write a letter to your first-year roommate at Babson. Tell him or her what it will be like to live with you, why you chose Babson, and what you are looking forward to the most in college.
Dear Roommate,
First of all, let me congratulate you on being accepted into the prestigious Babson College. After fourteen years of school, we are about to begin a major new stage in our lives, in a place that we have desired to belong for a long time.
As roommates, we will live day by day, support each other in the good and bad moments and will experience this new cycle together; therefore, I should explain a little about myself. I was born in Costa Rica, where I grew up until February, 2010. Since there, I lived seven months in Israel where I learned about Zionism and Israeli culture, and then, I lived three months in Boston where I improved my English through an English course. I consider myself as someone persevering, helpful and sociable, always looking for new experiences and challenges. I love sports, music, spending time with friends and meeting new people mainly.
Since we are both going to start a new phase of our lives at Babson College, I imagine that for you as for me, this university can provide us with everything we are looking for this new stage. Choosing Babson College as my first choice was easy. Through my research about colleges, I realized that Babson's excellent economics program, the technological and amazing facilities that it brings to its students, the green fields that surround the campus, the support and love of its students to Babson and finally, its wide variety of people, having more than 20% of international undergraduates; were facts that could facilitate me to meet my goals and to have an incredible experience as a university student.
As a student of Babson College, I expect to prosper as a person, acquiring the necessary tools to be a well-educated person and be able to respond to circumstances that may arise. Furthermore, I would like to interact with other students, learn from their cultures, establish contacts that could serve for the future, participate in college activities, join study groups and organizations, and support the Beavers as a passionate sports fan that I am. I cannot leave behind its Student Abroad Program. I am convinced that in order to fulfill my expectations for these four years, I have to be part of this program. The change in culture one experiences makes a person grow in a way nothing else can. I would definitely benefit from it by gaining new and different experiences in universities that have arrangements with Babson College.
I am excited about starting college; I cannot wait more the moment to meet you and I hope we will have an incredible experience in our first year together at Babson.
Sincerely,
Henry Milgram