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"a school to achieve the seemingly impossible dream" Northwestern Supp



jz7 6 / 20  
Dec 29, 2010   #1
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[b]What are the unique qualities of Northwestern University - and of any specific undergraduate school-and how will you take advantage of this?

I have always been a big dreamer. Growing up, I've told countless people my dream of working in the entertainment industry, the "show-biz". The dubious looks and awkward chuckles that I have received, however, remind me to this day how difficult that goal may be to obtain. Therefore, when I came across Northwestern University's School of Communications, my eyes lit up, for it was no longer a matter of choosing from an array of schools with academic programs too broad or narrow, but a matter of "communicating" my vision, my dream to this ideal university.

My current interest of study is very specific, yet open to new paths. I have inherited some business-savy nature from my parents and aspire to work in the industry on a more management level, such as an event coordinator. I hope to incorporate aspects from both business and communications into my future career. Most universities I find, only have a general "journalism" or "media culture" program, which deviates from my interests and varies from my focus. Here, I believe I will be able to explore a myriad of programs and opportunities all related to my dream, and undergo a significant personal development to inch toward my final destination. Furthermore, with the programs much more closely connected at the School of Communications, I would be able to share ideas and thoughts of a piece of work and accumulate different perspectives from my peers even if they are from a different major or academic program.

Because being comprised of great academic programs is critical for any school, I also sought out Northwestern University for its student body organizations and activities. For me, going to Northwestern would mean travelling to a foreign land, a stranger to the people, a stranger to the customs, a stranger to its culture. The four hundred student organizations would not only invoke my familiarity with a certain subject but introduce me to a broader context and allow myself to associate with those who share common passions. As a fervent communications lover, I indulge daily in the practice of expressing and absorbing various outlooks. To be given such a plethora of opportunities for me to perform this task brings me indescribable delight and excitement. It would only be foolish of me not to quench my thirst in this well of benefits.

Northwestern University, unlike many other prestigious universities, is located in a rather suburban location (Evanston campus) which allows students to be in a more concentrated and isolated area. This fosters a sort of community and allows for its own set of culture. Northwestern's small size would also allow for a more personalized college experience, giving students like me, an equal chance to create our own road to success.

I could go on with praise about Northwestern University because every minute detail, some that even the students neglect, is taken care of to such a great extent. These three factors: a rare, renown college with compelling academic programs, a diverse and abundance of student body organizations and activities and a comfortable, separated small community are what make Northwestern outstanding among the numerous universities to me. I am convinced that this is the school that can not only assist me in achieving my life-long dream, but prove those skeptical spectators wrong.

the_astronaut 2 / 4  
Dec 29, 2010   #2
"Most universities I find, only have a general "journalism" or "media culture" program,..."

I think you can reword this sentence as the comma placement after "I find" is slightly awkward.

"For me, going to Northwestern would mean travelling to a foreign land, a stranger to the people, a stranger to the customs, a stranger to its culture."

I think you can add colons after "...foreign land" since you list the aspects of studying abroad.

Overall, this is a really, really good essay. It's very specific to your interests! Do you mind telling me how many words its is?
blind527 7 / 34  
Dec 29, 2010   #3
I would add "I am confident" instead of "I am convinced" in the last sentence. It shows a better longing for Northwestern. I liked the essay, I thought it was well written and contains solid content. I think it explains your paths and objectives well. Good job!

Can anyone be so kind and take a look at my Georgetown essay about my description of myself? :)


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