What motivated you to apply to Rice University? Please be specific and limit your response to 200 words.
What first attracted me to this school was its name, "Rice". Two years ago, I had been completely unaware of Rice University. While my friend, Rachael, and I were researching for a business project on the agricultural system, I randomly clicked on a link that guided me to its website. As I browsed, I read about the abundant undergraduate, future-oriented research possibilities with world-class professors, the opportunities of studying abroad, and the chance of interacting with a nationally and internationally diverse student body. Although these are some of the most interesting aspects of Rice, what appeals to me the most is that Rice is right here in Houston, a few minutes away from home. I am finally comfortable in this city; unlike some of my friends, I do not want to leave home to go to college. Rice presents me with the opportunity of staying and still getting top-notch education. I immediately considered the institution as one of my top schools.
I want a rigorous course of study, one that will stimulate my way of thinking and will push my limits. I need heated and insightful classroom discussions that will improve my higher level thinking skills. I crave to rack my brain searching for answers until I can come up with innovative ways of solving questions. Because of small-sized classes and close contact with teachers, I know I can find that at Rice. I like that at Rice, I can double major even if my second choice is not in the same school of study, while taking other classes that spark my interest. Furthermore, picturing myself attending a school that is not only architecturally beautiful, but has small five-to-one student to faculty ratio, made Rice even more attractive. Rice's residential colleges and different approach on undergraduate studies will allow me to have the education and American college experience I seek.
WORD COUNT: 170
Please help me with the grammar and sentence structure. By the latter I mean tell me if i have run-on sentences that are best separated...
Does it flow? Does it sound generic?
What first attracted me to this school was its name, "Rice". Two years ago, I had been completely unaware of Rice University. While my friend, Rachael, and I were researching for a business project on the agricultural system, I randomly clicked on a link that guided me to its website. As I browsed, I read about the abundant undergraduate, future-oriented research possibilities with world-class professors, the opportunities of studying abroad, and the chance of interacting with a nationally and internationally diverse student body. Although these are some of the most interesting aspects of Rice, what appeals to me the most is that Rice is right here in Houston, a few minutes away from home. I am finally comfortable in this city; unlike some of my friends, I do not want to leave home to go to college. Rice presents me with the opportunity of staying and still getting top-notch education. I immediately considered the institution as one of my top schools.
I want a rigorous course of study, one that will stimulate my way of thinking and will push my limits. I need heated and insightful classroom discussions that will improve my higher level thinking skills. I crave to rack my brain searching for answers until I can come up with innovative ways of solving questions. Because of small-sized classes and close contact with teachers, I know I can find that at Rice. I like that at Rice, I can double major even if my second choice is not in the same school of study, while taking other classes that spark my interest. Furthermore, picturing myself attending a school that is not only architecturally beautiful, but has small five-to-one student to faculty ratio, made Rice even more attractive. Rice's residential colleges and different approach on undergraduate studies will allow me to have the education and American college experience I seek.
WORD COUNT: 170
Please help me with the grammar and sentence structure. By the latter I mean tell me if i have run-on sentences that are best separated...
Does it flow? Does it sound generic?
