This is my opinion for your writing
1. it will be better if you separete your body paragraph to become some paragraphs, sometimes I use this method for my essay:
- introduction (hook, general statement, my argue),
- body 1,
- body 2,
- body 3, and
- conclution (rewrite thesis, conclution, and my suggestion).
2. overall, your subject and verb agreement are good (top)
3. it will be better if you use constant tenses in your paragraphIntroduction
(put introduction such as there are many kind of class). (general explanation) Some people say...., (your opinion) my favorite class is science because I like doing the experiment, learning something new after each labs.Bodies
Science is a wonderful and amazing subject that helps us to explain the world. Imagine yourself flying in a plane. How could you breathe when there is so little air pressure? How can I watch TV up there? All of these question can be answered by using the knowledge from science. From learning science, I can get many experience and knowledge. For example,When my teacher got me to work on germination, I was super excited.On lab, one reaction can create another reaction. If the people who were doing the experiment are not careful, they might get the wrong reaction and repeating it again.Conclution
[I think, it will be better if you write this in new paragraph] Therefore, to be successful in science class, we are not only able to handle the broad knowledge but also be careful in every single aspect and know how to apply them in the real world. Science is an interesting subject ,developing my patience and diligence, and gained valuable experience when doing lad and project. Science is also used to find cures and treatment for people who are suffering illness . Doctors and nurses use their scientific knowledge to explain the course of treatment to patients and applying them in their treatment.
[I think, it will be better if you write this in new paragraph] Sciences are needed and used in many different fields today. Science has always interested me because of the never ending knowledge. There is always something new to learn and study about.Science very exciting, interesting and fun,it help me to answer and explain specifically many different questions and wondering that exist in real life by what I learned from science, understanding deeper in the new science concept.
To conclude,As almost everything in life, science always expands. The application of science in the real life, the never-end knowledge and my own curiosity to explain the new concepts are the reasons why science is my favorite class. So I suggest others to ... (i put my suggestion)
thats all my opinion, also give me some correction if you have other opinions
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