"THE SEARCH FOR MYSELF" COMMUNICATIONS MAJOR TRANSFER ESSAY

It's not yet finished....but how is it so far?
Any suggestions would be wonderful!

My heart sped up as I sprinted down the covered walkway. I gripped my schedule firmly as I passed by unrecognizable faces. "Where is my Human Dilemmas seminar?", I whispered to myself. I finally spotted the posted sign with my seminar group name. I felt relieved when my peer advisor came up to me. "Is there Fustok on the list?", I asked. "Yes," she replied. She checked my name off as if I was one item on a grocery list that was already taken care of. That was just the beginning of college for me and I knew figuring out what I wanted to do while I was there could not be easily taken care of.

Before I started my freshman year at college, people wondered what I was going to study when I arrived there. Even my parents pressed on about what I was going to study while in college. However, I was not worried that I did not have a specific course of study in mind.I just wanted to go off to college with an open mind. I was undecided about my future, but a liberal arts education helped me narrow down my interests to find an area of study I was interested in.

I am currently taking a Literary Studies course at Skidmore, which fuses my writing and research skills. Ever since high school, I have had this desire to write and know more about the world around me. Communication between the individual and society is a changing,important matter. While many teenagers watch television during their free time, I would rather research interesting stories as well as ideas and educate other people about them through writing. I enjoy the challenge of making people want to read what I write. It is good to educate people about things they would not normally learn or know about.I want to major in Communications...

It's really good. Perhaps you might want to elaborate on communications and its relevance to you a bit more, as it looks like you plan to do. Great start!

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Would you be willing to read mine?