'Being in a separate country' - stanford what matters to you and why

What matters to you and why?

In 2001 my mom was relocated to London. She became the sole working parent while my dad became a full-time father and looked after my sister and me. After a few years my mom was relocated back to New York City and then again to Zurich. My sister and I had just settled into new schools so my parents made the decision of having my mom work abroad while we stayed in London with my dad. At the time I saw my family to be unconventional and different to all of friends' families, which was difficult.

Being in a separate country to my mom was tough at times but I have found that our relationship became stronger because of it. I appreciate every moment that I have with her and enjoy spending time as a family. I see the importance of sitting down together at the dinner table and discussing our day, which I know not many people do as often nowadays. Having parents who live in separate countries has shown me the importance of having a strong support system. They have presented themselves as a team to support me in everything I have done. When my mom is unable to attend clarinet recitals or regattas, my dad is always cheering me on for the both of them. I have learned the importance of communication from seeing my dad jump on a plane to see my mom for the weekend.

My unconventional upbringing has led me to value a strong support system, be it through friends or family. Without having the support and motivation of those around you, I believe that it is difficult to achieve your goals. Because of my parents and their influence, I tend to form close relationships with people and value loyalty and the ability to depend on someone.

At the time,I saw my family to be unconventional and different to all of friends' families, which was difficult. "At first, i struggled to live with my family's unconventional lifestyle."

Being in a separate country to my mom was tough --Being separated from by mom was tough
at times, but I have found that our relationship became stronger because of it. I appreciate every moment that I have with her and enjoy spending time as a family. I see the importance of sitting down together at the dinner table and discussing our day, which I know not many people do as often nowadays. Having parents who live in separate countries has shown me the importance of having a strong support system. They have presented themselves as a team to support me in everything I have done. When my mom is unable to attend clarinet recitals or regattas what are regattas? , my dad is always cheering me on for the both of them. I have learned the importance of communication from--> by seeing my dad jump on a plane to see my mom for the weekend. <--How does your dad going to see your mom show you the importance of communication?

My unconventional upbringing has led me to value a strong support system, be it through friends or family. Without having the support and motivation of those around you, I believe that it is difficult to achieve your goals. Because of my parents and their influence, I tend to form close relationships with people and value loyalty and the ability to depend on someone.

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i like how you chose family as something that mattered to you the most but were able to make it unique.

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i think you should show this off a little more

great essay :)
it shows diversity.
and is clean and crisp.

you might want to think about elaborating a TINY bit on the recitals/regettas.

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goodluck, fishie21

This is a really good essay. Try to include any activities you have been in with this quality or something. But overall well done.

Check out my essay once I put it up. Thank you.