What single activity listed in the activity section of Application are you most proud of why?

Out of all the activities listed, I have enjoyed Future Educators of America the most. FEA, is a club that goes to elementary schools where each member is mentored by a teacher. Although I never plan on going into education, this club has taught me how valuable teachers are to the growth of kids. This experience has also taught me how to teach people which has helped me in other aspects of my life, such as, tutoring people in my own school with chemistry and physics.I am glad I ended up joining this club, else I would of never been able to witness the impact you can have on kids and the rewarding sense that comes along with it. By expanding my horizons, I have been able to gain knowledge about teaching I otherwise would not have acquired.

Nikita, is this a word limited statement? I ask because you have posted quite a short response to the question. So I am not sure if you just under developed the essay or if you really need to keep the answer short :-) If you are not interested in teaching then I do not advice that you use this particular activity as the one you are most proud of mainly because it does not relate to your chosen major. All of your answers to the common app essays and statements should somehow tie in directly to your chosen major in order to show the development of your interest in your chosen field and your dedication to further improving your craft in that area of study. If you can choose another activity, I suggest you do so. Otherwise, try to find a way to relate this answer to your desired major to make it work better with the common app, SOP, and personal statement essays.

I am glad I ended up
joining this club, else I would 'of'----''have?''
never been able to witness the
impact 'you' ---''teachers?'' can have on kids and
the rewarding sense that comes
along with it. '' what if you put this lines like this?''--- through the club, I have expanded my
horizons and been able to gain
knowledge about teaching.

I agree to what vine typed, why don't you use a leadership role or competition you have won. I think that will express your ability more.

Thanks for the other review of my essay. I will like your review about my new essay.