I think over all, this is a relatively good essay. However, you can still improve it by tweaking some sentences and also by fixing your transition of ideas.
. My passion for the sport rekindled; however, I saw soccer only as an enjoyable hobby and did not consider pursuing it on a competitive front. "Soccer tryouts on the lower field after school Monday at 3:00 pm," echoed through the halls as I walked to class on a brisk November morning.
The transition from the first sentence to the next is quite abrupt. Maybe you can place "Soccer tryouts on the lower field after school Monday at 3:00 pm," in the next paragraph instead of ending your first paragraph with this line. OR, you could also insert, I don't know, more connective ideas to make the transition smoother? Just a thought though :)
Anyway, the best of luck to you!