Congrats roomie! If you're reading this, we both made it to Stanford! I'd also like to extend congratulations on getting someone as cool as me for a roommate. I'm just kidding, which you'll soon find out when we meet for the first time. How to begin to describe myself: well, as long as my sarcasm, obsession with all things unusual and book addiction doesn't bother you, we'll get along fine.
My name Shakir Muhammad, and hopefully I will be your future brother. Embracing the geek stereotype is probably the greatest thing I have ever done (besides learning to play guitar). In embracing it, I think I've created a unique style all my own somewhere between movie star suave and clumsy nerd. I want to let you know now, I may disappoint you. You are probably expecting some scrawny, kid with coke bottle glasses, who can hardly go a week without playing World of Warcraft, sorry but that's not me. I am fluent in Sarcasm and a bit melodramatic. Although I am a High School athlete who loves to be in shape, you're probably more likely to find me "geeking out" over a new book than screaming obscenities at the football game...unless it's the Super bowl.
The majority of the time we spend together will be filled with awkward memories and funny experiences. I will probably irritate you to no end with my attempts at playing guitar or singing badly, and my ridiculous sense of humor that will have you rolling on the floor. Hopefully we can grow to be siblings sharing everything from our room, to advice. Don't worry about me waking you in the middle of the night with some girl in our room; I'm a bit too nerdy for that.
I believe that being paired with you may be the best thing that ever happens to you or me, not because I am so awesome that I am better than you, but the complete opposite. I am the epitome of nonconformity and a bit random. Fundamentally, I am a blank slate for you. We could start out talking about your favorite music and somehow graduate to pointing out plot holes in the latest episode of Nikita or Burn Notice--my favorite shows. Just know that I am a wild card. I have so much more to say to you, but how about we save that for our first meeting.
-Shakir, the weirdest best friend you'll ever have.
I really wanted to bring my quirkiness and my randomosity to this essay...Questions? Comments? Concerns?
I'm just kidding, which you'll soon find out when we meet for the first time.
AHAHAHHAHAA this wording makes it sound like your roommate will, upon meeting you, find out that you are NOT "cool" :P
In embracing it
maybe "by" or "through" instead of "in"?.. but whatever you think shows your personality more.
This doesn't sound contrived at all; I love how you let your voice shine through! (:
I would love if you could critique my essay as well...thanks!
'My name is'..you forgot the is! I like the essay, but I would advice you not to oversell yourself in it, as it might set the wrong tone. Overall, it shows that you are a confident person, but try excluding comments like 'I will have you rolling on the floor' as it might give the wrong impression to the reader. Sorry, I'm only trying to be constructively critical! But overall I think it's good essay, I enjoyed reading it. Goodluck!
Any comments on my personal statement will be greatly appreciated! :)
