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Stanford essay-"subjected to raging humidity"



gracedrift 7 / 34  
Dec 31, 2010   #1
Tell us what makes Stanford a good place for you.

I want to wake up, stretch, open my window, and gaze upon the physical beauty of sunny California. Oh, let me drive down to the beach, kick off my shoes and barrel into the ocean with friends or hike amongst the Redwoods one lazy week-end!

Growing up in Texas, I've been subjected to raging humidity and heat. Growing up in Austin, I've been blessed with a diverse, liberal community with many opportunities to explore other cultures and lifestyles. I perceive parallels between my Texan oasis and your progressive state, such as cultural diversity and liberal ideology. These are important to me, especially as I plan to study cultural anthropology. Living amongst such a heterogeneous assortment of individuals should advance my cultural understanding as a global citizen and as a student of humanity.

People describe me as quirky. I believe I gained this reputation due to an unmistakably individualist perspective in addition to a voracious appetite for fun. Perusing Stanford's website, I discovered insights into the student body's personality. The students appear not only intellectual, but fun and actively engaged beyond the classroom. I desire a community that stimulates me intellectually, but doesn't take itself too seriously. Stanford boasts the sense of humor and vivacity that I seek.

The ideal undergraduate experience lies in a friendly, intellectually-stimulating environment-preferably against the backdrop of temperate California. Stanford's diversity, opportunity and personality speak to me. Bring on the academic challenges; just equip me with engaging peers and I'll pack my sense of humor.

ingenium 5 / 13  
Dec 31, 2010   #2
It seems like you send a lot of time talking about your background and too little about Stanford itself. Try to condense the background into one paragraph and spend the rest of the words talking specifics about Stanford.

For example: Stanford's diversity, opportunity and personality speak to me.
I think that you can say that about any top 20 college, what specifically does Stanford have?

Overall, I thought it was very well written and quite enjoyable!


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