Although I have always loved this new age music, (I've begun making it as well)
Having ( ) part is distrupts the flow of your essay.. try to find a way to nicely put it into your sentence.
this new age music
you are referring to Nine Inch Nails and Daft Punk, right? Make that part clearer and try to explain more what a 'new age music' is. Also, I don't really get how new age music contrasts with electronic music, even though you talk about the sinusoidal graphs (which makes me even more confused..).
I see how your essay can be opaque, but it can definitely improve with your further explaining of new age music and electronic music, and how they contrast to each other.
Otherwise, the essay was really interesting. :)
I would love it if you could also take a look at my essay.