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Personal Statement for Tulane! I'm struggling with coming up with something engaging!



Ksmith123 1 / -  
Oct 15, 2015   #1
Hello I wrote an uncompleted Tulane personal statement, can any check and see what I have already is eligible for Tulane standards?

Ever since I was 5, I enjoyed drawing. While I was younger, art was nothing more than just a side hobby; But as I grew over time, I felt as if art became a much more bigger part of my life. I love art, but my interest primarily lies in creating vibrant and abstract pieces, or re-creating painful movements of my life, along with designing characters (humans and animals) and creating a backstory and implementing them in a situation that would be similar to mine.

The dedication I have towards my art stems primarily from my past. I had low self-esteem, and was diagnosed with social anxiety along with a small eating disorder. I was born with an oral condition called bi-maxillary protrusion. It disfigured the lower part of my face. I retrieved braces about 6 years ago to fix the problem, but still till this day these number of issues still affect me. During this time, I needed away to escape from reality once in a while. I never had anyone to talk so I wanted a way to portray those feelings. I feel that art became a gateway for me to showcase myself about who I am and what I like. I didn't truly have any friends and I never really liked going out to any social events, so instead, I would just decide to stay home and inspirationally draw things that made me cheerful. Whether it be drawings that displayed struggle or something happy, letting out those feelings though art helped me progressed to become the artist I am today.

Japanese culture/animation, big studios such as Ghibli and Madhouse, and Comics such as DC motivate me to do illustration as a career; they were my biggest inspiration for drawing. I remember watching the beautiful Japanese film "spirited away" and being blown away by how imaginative and emotional it is. I recall the time when I picked up my first comic book, Batman: Under the Redhood and was captivated by the creation of the characters and fictional world. The creativity, the strong storytelling, and the expression of these artists and the integration of that in their works provoked me to create vibrant/mellow, abstract, and cartoony-aesthetic works of art.

Currently, I am now pushing myself to do works that consist of capturing the simplistic aspects of life, in addition to energetic/moody and abstract work with lively color variations. I enjoy drawing works with basic ordinary things such as: Animals, people and plants. My favorite part of drawing is the "inspiration" portion, as I like portraying realistic, colorful, and cartoony-like works in a digital sense.

vangiespen - / 4077  
Oct 16, 2015   #2
Kaylyn, your essay seems to try to cover a lot of topics in a personal statement. Could you do me a favor and post the actual Tulane personal statement prompt here? I need to read it so that I can have an idea as to how to edit and revise your essay to better suit the prompt. I think that one of the many topics that you have in here is supposed to be the central theme of the prompt. I just can't put my finger on it. On which one it is supposed to be.

For now, I can tell you that I think the essay is running way too long. When you write a personal statement, you should focus on a particular theme or topic based upon your personal experience. Of all of the topics that you have included in your essay, I think that you should concentrate more on how the bi-maxilliary protusion led you to your love of art. While I understand that you started drawing when you were five years old, it doesn't carry the same impact and revelation that connecting your love of art with the facial shortcoming can provide.

I am still not sure of your interest in manga has any real relation to the essay prompt so I will reserve my comments on that for when I already know what the prompt is. Overall though, this essay has managed to paint a very thorough picture of the development of your interest in art and the personal connection that accompanies it. I am sure that it requires some editing and revision and we can deal with that once you share the prompt here.
justivy03 - / 2265  
Oct 19, 2015   #3
- became a much more bigger part of my life.

- but still tillto this day these
- feelings thr ough art helped

- Currently, I am now pushing myself to do
- workspieces that consist of
- I enjoy drawing works with basic ordinary( "basic" and "ordinary" are synonymous) things

I'm not an expert on Tulane standards when it comes to their admissions process, however, aside from the remarks above, I believe that your essay, depicts your eagerness ta take art to a different level, being able to know what your strength in art and where it lies whether abstract, nature or people, you have a definite subject and it doesn't restrict you from making other inspirational pieces. This is a very good characteristic of an artist, just like a writer, you have your strong subjects, where you can write a full book in a week of writing, on the other hand you are able to write different topics too.

I wish you all the best with Tulane and I hope I was able to help.


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