"My step grandmother died of type 1 diabetes" - Common App essay Topic 2.

Discuss some issue of personal, local, national, or international concern and its importance to you.

People experience many different things in their lifetime that may have a profound effect on them. The effect could be positive, negative, or a combination of them both. In fact, there was an experience that changed my life for the better and that experience helped me realize what I wanted to do or the rest of my life. My step grandmother died of type 1 diabetes five years ago; her ongoing struggle with diabetes was heartbreaking. This made me realize that people with diseases in general need to be properly informed. I made it my goal to study and to go to college and to become a doctor so I can help people with diseases.

My step grandmother was an outgoing and bodacious person. She loved to dance and sing. Her heart was made of pure love, she was a very helpful person to me, and she taught me that no matter what problem you have there is a way to overcome it. I really took that to heart because there she was struggling with diabetes and still working hard to provide for her family day in and day out. I remember the day when I broke my leg from playing soccer. I was devastated that I would have to sit out the rest of the season. So after I got my cast off it was difficult for me to play soccer, I just could not play like I used to. I was mad at myself for not doing the best I could, but my step grandmother said to me "no matter what happens to you good or bad you have to learn how to grow from that experience and become a better person" from then on I just kept on practicing and practicing every day until I was ready. That season my team went on to win the championship and I owe it all to my step grandmother. But not everyone's life is all fine and dandy later on that year my step grandmother was diagnosed with type 1 diabetes.

The day in the life of my step grandmother was very complicated. It consisted of hourly blood sugar level tests and countless insulin injections. Each day was a challenge for her, having to wake up early every morning and check her blood sugar levels and inject herself with insulin. The expression on her face every day screamed agony. She was constantly sick and never went to the doctor on a regular basis, even though our family urged her she would just say that she didn't have the money to go. I felt bad that I could not do anything to help her because she has helped me so much. By the time I promised myself that I would research the disease and find out everything about it so I can help her live a better life I was too late. My step grandmother never knew the exact symptoms or problems that came with having diabetes and that miscommunication between her and the doctor cost her, her life. That is why I promised myself that I would become a doctor and make sure that I try my best to not let that happen again. If I could do that imagine all the grandmothers, grandfathers, mothers, and fathers I could save. Those children would not have to go through what I went through.

Not to be rude, but the common rule of thumb is to avoid talking about the death of a relative, especially a distant one like your step-grandmother. It is just too common. Please rewrite. I understand that you spent a lot of time on this essay, but no colleges are going to be impressed by the classic "I want to be a doctor because my _____ died of cancer". I know I sound harsh, but trust me - it is for your own good.

Different experience in human's life sometimes have a profound effect on them such as positive, negative, or a combination of them both. In fact, I have had an experience that changed my direction to the better way for the rest of my life.

My step grandmother died of one type of diabetes five years ago;
her ongoing struggle with diabetes was heartbreaking and made me to realized people who are have this diseases in general need to be properly informed. it made my goal to study and go to the college and become a doctor so I can help people with diseases.

My step grandmother was an outgoing and bodacious person. She loved to dance and sing. Her heart was made of pure love, she was a very helpful person to me, and she taught me that no matter what problem do you have there is always a way to overcome it. I was really heart because she was struggling with diabetes and still working hard to provide for her family day in and day out.

I remember the day when I broken my leg from playing soccer. I was devastated I would have to sit out for rest of the season. So after I got my cast off it was difficult for me to play soccer, I just could not play like I used to. I was crazy because I could not doing the best, my step grandmother said to me "no matter what happens to you good or bad you have to learn how to grow from that experience and become a better person" from then on I just kept on practicing and practicing every day until I was ready. That season my team went on to win the championship and I owe it all to my step grandmother. But not everyone's life is all fine and dandy later on that year my step grandmother was diagnosed with type 1 diabetes.

hi i have done some changes on your essay till here i hope it helps u:)

I have never heard that rule. It makes sense, though, because it can be one of those situations where someone seems to be using the essay as an opportunity for some therapy instead of writing something that has value for others. Yet, I really think that even though it is common you can write about a death as long as you show the "moral of the story," the insight you derive from the experience.

Paragraph 2 has too much story. Revise the end of that so that it gets back to the point of making sure sufferers are informed properly. Let the example of your grandmother be a powerful example to support your main idea. Was she insufficiently informed? If so, discuss that in paragraph 2.

Revise this so that you write directly about the issue. Articulate that issue, Jorge, so that the essay will be about the issue rather than your grandmother. Using your grandmother as an example is very, very good, but make sure you express (in the first paragraph) the 'issue of importance.'

Good luck, friend!