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stipendium hungaricum undergraduate essay for applying to BsC in biology



unitzetazeta 1 / -  
Dec 17, 2024   #1
hello, this was my last year's motivational letter, unfortunately i didnt got the scholarship so i wanna try to appy again. kindly check if there's things that neeeds fixing, thanks!
The journey of me pursuing an international degree can be traced back since I was a child. Out of all things, I've drawn myself more in the realm of natural science. As a kid I always loved to do tiny experiments, loved to watch national geographic shows, technology and science programs, and I never forget the first time I saw the news about the melting ice caps, "how can i participate to prevent changes and destruction in nature?"I asked myself at the time, since then, it solidified my cause to contribute in the field of environmental issues and natural resources, and that's why i'm choosing to pursue a bachelor degree in biology, other than being a broad field that encompasses everything from ecosystem and environment to human organs, the study allowed me to pursue my passion of innovation since biological studies could let me cross other disciplines as well such as biomedical technology, environmental biotechnology and so on, with european countries, such as hungary, known for their progression in natural science and technology, could introduce me to professional knowledge about biology.
My greatest demonstration of my passion can be traced back in highschool. My time in highschool is nothing short of living my childhood dream, ever since senior year, even up until senior year, I've been active in extracurricular activities that relates to my passion which is learning and developing my capacity in problem solving with innovation in my high school's scientific writing club.
From that club, I've managed to learn various disciplinaries, one of which is me and my research partner self taught ourselves to create a machine learning app prototype that can be installed on an android phone, which can be used to detect various skin diseases. Despite being a prototype with its shortcomings, i won't forget the time i stumbled to a lecturer from a top university which also a researcher in machine learning tech, in that opportunity i manage to ask his opinion on my prototype, in which he complimented that my prototype is very advance for a high schooler and said that industries in japan has used the technology similar to mine, later he personally ask my number so he could contact me for later cooperation.
Furthermore, not only did I get involved in leadership roles, such as being the vice president for the science club, the club introduced me not just to solve problems with innovation, but also introduced me to ideas of innovations incorporated with local wisdom. My science club mainly focuses on scientific innovation competitions and those competitions emphasised and showcased people from other parts of Indonesia solving regional problems while utilising Indonesia's abundance of resources. From that I've understood the capability of Indonesian youth's potential, one great example I know is there's high school research team in Tarakan, north Kalimantan, managed to utilise seaweed as a biodegradable packaging from the local beach in tarakan. I've also contributed to my region, with developing a card game to educate people of Jakarta on how to mitigate floods.
Knowing the capabilities of the youth of Indonesia, motivates me to study at an international university, not just to broaden my knowledge, but to broaden the connection of my nation to international insight. With that, I believe my knowledge and experience in Indonesia's academic research culture, bundled with international insight, could broaden each nation's potential, Especially in the sector of development in natural resources, considering Indonesia's abundance of natural resources . And with the stipendium hungaricum scholarship, would allow me to study in Hungary, the country which has the most Nobel laureates in the world, also the scholarship would made me worry less about funding, because my parents didn't allow me to study at my country's top university due to being unable to afford the fee.
I will be grateful if I can become an awardee of Stipendium Hungaricum because it is a big help for me to achieve my goal in the future.
Thank you for your consideration.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15461  
Dec 18, 2024   #2
You cannot reuse the same essay for your new application. This essay is still based on the reasons why you did not win the scholarship last year. I do not see any new information in the essay that would refer to how you have improved your skills, learning, and other factors, over the past year. You have to showed remarkable growth and improvement over time for the essay to work in your favor during this application cycle. You should be outlining your improvements and working your way towards a new presentation that would help the reviewer consider your application based upon new information and skills developed.Once you present an essay that contains a rehash of last year's information, you cannot expect to have a different result this time around.
habibraza22 2 / 8  
2 days ago   #3
I would recommend to specifically mention why you want to study biology in hungary. Rsearch about the market trends and developments of this sector in Hungary and include that in your essay.


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