Hello. This is my first post on the forums and my first application in my list of colleges so far. I really feel like my essays could use a lot of work, but that's why I came here. Here is my supplement essay question:
There is a Quaker saying: ''Let your life speak.'' Describe the environment in which you were raised--your family, home, neighborhood or community--and how it influenced the person you are today. (200-250 words)
I lived in sunny Florida in a family with a low-income for all of my life, but I was surrounded with the most hospitable people in my church in Jacksonville, that helped me through hard times. I had a rough upbringing with my father, but the people I grew up with gave me the strength to keep going. I still call these people my family. My brothers, sisters, aunts, uncles, and grandparents that aren't related by blood. Their charitable ways taught me to give to others in need, because I knew what they went through. I have a very tight-knit community which hastened to aide anyone in trouble. It takes a whole village to raise a child. This rings true in my community, who raised me to give rather than receive, and never let my values be shaken.
Having less only caused me to appreciate what I had more, and having trouble at home only made me avoid bad choices outside of my home. I never participated in drugs or alcohol because I realized the repercussions would only make life more difficult. Although growing up was hard, it gave me empathy toward others who were struggling in life. I'm thankful for the life I had because it built me into the person I am today, and made me able to truly understand others.
--Any punctuation errors, or anything that just doesn't sound quite right would be helpful. I'm also wondering if I should scrap it all and try with a different subject? I'm very wary about the whole thing being good enough. Thanks for any help!
There is a Quaker saying: ''Let your life speak.'' Describe the environment in which you were raised--your family, home, neighborhood or community--and how it influenced the person you are today. (200-250 words)
I lived in sunny Florida in a family with a low-income for all of my life, but I was surrounded with the most hospitable people in my church in Jacksonville, that helped me through hard times. I had a rough upbringing with my father, but the people I grew up with gave me the strength to keep going. I still call these people my family. My brothers, sisters, aunts, uncles, and grandparents that aren't related by blood. Their charitable ways taught me to give to others in need, because I knew what they went through. I have a very tight-knit community which hastened to aide anyone in trouble. It takes a whole village to raise a child. This rings true in my community, who raised me to give rather than receive, and never let my values be shaken.
Having less only caused me to appreciate what I had more, and having trouble at home only made me avoid bad choices outside of my home. I never participated in drugs or alcohol because I realized the repercussions would only make life more difficult. Although growing up was hard, it gave me empathy toward others who were struggling in life. I'm thankful for the life I had because it built me into the person I am today, and made me able to truly understand others.
--Any punctuation errors, or anything that just doesn't sound quite right would be helpful. I'm also wondering if I should scrap it all and try with a different subject? I'm very wary about the whole thing being good enough. Thanks for any help!
