IM TAKING HOMER SIMPSON TO CONGRESS (opportunity to bring any person)

so this is for the NYU application and it asks:

If you had the opportunity to bring any person -- past or present, fictional or nonfictional -- to a place that is special to you (your hometown or country, a favorite location, etc), who would you bring and why? Tell us what you would share with that person.

I would bring Homer Simpson to Congress. I suppose it would a bit hectic, but perhaps his hijinks could show all our representatives that although, there is a virtue in being professional, we are all human and that they could all have an outburst of laughter together as a homogeneous legislative body rather than an outburst of anger and instigation that divides the government.

I like the concept of this essay, but I don't understand how congress is a special place for you unless you parent is a member of it or something. Also your paragraph is only two sentences. You might want to replace some of those commas for periods.

I would bring Homer Simpson to Congress. --great hook it makes me want to keep reading

His presence would cause hysteria, however, perhaps his hijinks could convince our representatives...

there is a virtue in being professional, we are all human and that they could all have an outburst of laughter together as a homogeneous legislative body

You might want to do some rewording here as I think you can make this essay stronger

Will you please read my northwestern essay?