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"Things will get better" - Support- BYU Admissions Essay



abjohnson117 3 / 10  
Nov 27, 2013   #1
As a bit of background information:
BYU is a religiously affiliated college, so having an essay with religious undertones is typical, not risky. So even if it sounds weird, please stick with it!!

Word limit: 250, Word count: 250
Prompt: What is one of the most difficult things you have ever done or experienced? What made it difficult and what did you learn?

I had anticipated for it, but it never really struck me until it actually happened. This past summer, my parents separated. It devastated me; I never thought that I could actually get through it. It altered the course of my life in many ways, alterations that I was never used too. Responsibilities were added to my already busy schedule, I was living in a near empty house with only my father, but most painfully, the estrangement and loneliness I was feeling. At first, I believed there was no help. However, I was wrong.

Throughout the whole process, I came to find out how supportive my friends, my ward family, and my Heavenly Father all are. Before this situation, I never needed to rely on anybody before. In spite of that, I realized that there are people who really care and look out for me. All my friends tried to make me feel better, through simply spending time with me, or even offering emotional support. My bishop was constantly wondering how I was doing and always asked if there was anything he could do to help. Everybody in my ward offered their support, asking if there was anything they could do.

Yet, I know that my Heavenly Father sent all these people to me, in my hour of need. I constantly prayed to my Heavenly Father, pleading for Him to help me through this. He answered that prayer and more. I can still hear His resounding answer: "Things will get better."

Pahan 1 / 1824  
Nov 27, 2013   #2
I was living in a near empty house with only my father, but most painfully, it was the estrangement and loneliness I was feeling

... I feel this is incomplete otherwise, however, it's not going to help you with word count :D
I was living with my father in a near empty house feeling unbearably lonely.

Before this situation, I never needed to rely on anybodybefore .

... first "before" works on the second :D

I can still hear His resounding answer: "Things will get better."

....Good ending :)
selmasanchez 2 / 17  
Nov 27, 2013   #3
Wow! Who knew in the confined 250 word limit so much could be said, this mini essay helps the reader view not only a personal side but a religious side to you. Great job! :)
OP abjohnson117 3 / 10  
Nov 27, 2013   #4
Thanks I really do appreciate the help!!!


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