However, it only took one glance around the tiny farm to realize how phenomenal it truly was
^Isnt phenomenal a bit too powerful of a word for this context?
My eyes finally landed on my little helper, and I waved at her. The van was revving up to leave, and I watched in awe as her tiny little hand formed itself into a thumbs-up.
^She could have also been signalling to you that you did a good job. It does show appreciation, which can be interpreted as being thankful. It could have also been a 'nice knowin ya' or 'this was cool' kind of thing.
A single tear rolled down my cheek as I realized that in one tiny action, she was thanking me. Because of her, I left Cambodia realizing that anything, whether it be a language barrier or a national sadness, could be overcome.
^Did you realize this, just because of a thumbs up? I find it quite amazing, how you 'realized' that 'ANYTHING' can be overcome, just because your little helper gave you a thumbs up...perhaps 'anything' is a bit too broad of a word.
Also, earlier, you had focused on the 'physical and emotional scars' of the two elderly people. Then, you say, that the young ones ' were the first generation that hadn't been directly affected by the Khmer Rouge'
^So, whilst the previous generation are 'sad', you kind of suggest that the younglings are not necessarily, 'sad', but are perhaps more oppressed due to the movement but do have the opportunities to 'outgrow it'. Alright, but then in that case, does it necessarily make it a 'national sadness'. From what I can interpret from your essay, the youthful are more hopeful, than sad.
I was in Tanzania last year, and did some volunteer work with some Masaii tribes, and even though the children's living standards and circumstances are totally different from mine, they did not seem 'sad'. Perhaps, it is 'saddening' to see people's lives be completely contrasted to ours.
That's not entirely the point...but if that's how it comes across, then I'll try to change it. I just mean that there was some form of communication - she understood me in some way. I guess thank is a bad word choice...
^What exactly are you trying to say? I think your essay is quite well written, and naturally, the hardest parts to write are the introduction and the conclusion and these should aim to be the most striking in some way. Particularly the conclusion in my opinion. What are you trying to conclude here? Also, you should mention how this experience has 'influnced' you as a person.