Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (1000 character maximum).
Rough Draft:
Before calling my name to receive a certificate, coach's words were, "She is an important part of this team and has come a long way since freshman year." I found passion in what started as a camp activity, beach volleyball. This interest eventually led me to try out for the high school volleyball team. I loved the energy and intensity of the game. I knew it was going to be a challenge, for I was not blessed with the skills-or ideal height. While I was just beginning my freshman year, other girls were playing for their third or fourth year. It was a risk trying out for the team but one of the best decisions I have ever made. I remember my first day of tryouts was very difficult. When the coach demonstrated a drill, I had to copy these motions but do the opposite because I am left-handed. My muscles were not used to moving these different directions and I could feel it the next morning. One day during practice, everything just clicked. The way my hand hit the ball and how the ball hit my arms to make a pass... Not only did it sound right, it felt right. I dedicated a great deal of time to volleyball. When I was on the court, I gave my best efforts and was always eager to learn. Off the court, I was practicing in my backyard. My improvement was noticed and during my sophomore year I was a starting player on the junior varsity team. During my junior year my coach had confidence in me to fill in the starting right-side position on the varsity team. I had to adjust my footwork and my arm swing. Not only did I learn how to play volleyball, I learned about myself. I saw how much I could accomplish with hard work. We all had a goal and that was to become a final four team in the playoffs. I learned to be a team player, knowing my actions would affect those around me. I was once a beginner and became a role model for girls on JV. If you compare my first game to my last game, I am a different person. I have pride every time I put on my Hilltopper blue jersey. Discipline and focus was the key to success and it took me far. I continue to use the idea of learning and passion beyond the court, allowing me to have an open mind and constantly to try new things.
I need help cutting out some of the non-important stuff and emphasizing the stuff that is needed, thanks !
Rough Draft:
Before calling my name to receive a certificate, coach's words were, "She is an important part of this team and has come a long way since freshman year." I found passion in what started as a camp activity, beach volleyball. This interest eventually led me to try out for the high school volleyball team. I loved the energy and intensity of the game. I knew it was going to be a challenge, for I was not blessed with the skills-or ideal height. While I was just beginning my freshman year, other girls were playing for their third or fourth year. It was a risk trying out for the team but one of the best decisions I have ever made. I remember my first day of tryouts was very difficult. When the coach demonstrated a drill, I had to copy these motions but do the opposite because I am left-handed. My muscles were not used to moving these different directions and I could feel it the next morning. One day during practice, everything just clicked. The way my hand hit the ball and how the ball hit my arms to make a pass... Not only did it sound right, it felt right. I dedicated a great deal of time to volleyball. When I was on the court, I gave my best efforts and was always eager to learn. Off the court, I was practicing in my backyard. My improvement was noticed and during my sophomore year I was a starting player on the junior varsity team. During my junior year my coach had confidence in me to fill in the starting right-side position on the varsity team. I had to adjust my footwork and my arm swing. Not only did I learn how to play volleyball, I learned about myself. I saw how much I could accomplish with hard work. We all had a goal and that was to become a final four team in the playoffs. I learned to be a team player, knowing my actions would affect those around me. I was once a beginner and became a role model for girls on JV. If you compare my first game to my last game, I am a different person. I have pride every time I put on my Hilltopper blue jersey. Discipline and focus was the key to success and it took me far. I continue to use the idea of learning and passion beyond the court, allowing me to have an open mind and constantly to try new things.
I need help cutting out some of the non-important stuff and emphasizing the stuff that is needed, thanks !