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Transformation helps us benefit from new enviorenment; Common App Transfer Essay



jpsmyth 7 / 21  
Jan 1, 2013   #1
"My Past is not an Accurate Depiction of Who I Have Become"

The time that I have spent at _________ has caused a lot of changes in my life; changes in interests, aspirations for my future, and most importantly a change in mindset. During my three semesters here I have established a sense of purpose as a student, developed an efficient work ethic, and attained an ambition to excel academically, all of which I was lacking in the past. Throughout high school I was always considered an "average" student, which has been exhibited in my GPA and SAT scores. Though I believe that I had potential, I never had the motivation to push myself to escape mediocrity. Recently I have begun to see things from an entirely different perspective however. After my first semester of college, which entailed yet another mediocre performance on my behalf, I experienced a change that would finally allow me to free myself of the confines of being a run-of-the-mill student.

It was at this point that I became interested in pursuing medicine. This decision guided me to find a new sense of enthusiasm to achieve my full potential academically, and to prosper intellectually. For the first time in years I found myself genuinely fascinated by schoolwork. As a newly proclaimed science major, I was captivated by the material in my general chemistry and molecular biology classes, and knowing that these subjects make up not even one-millionth of the scientific world has left me eager to delve deeper into this ever-expanding field. The newfound values that I have developed at ______ have left me in search of a new academic setting that will better suit my interests. (will change this last sentence)

Attending _______ has not only helped me mature as both a student and a person, but it has also given me the opportunity to learn from outstanding professors, and the ability to experience the great city of ______. However there are undoubtedly a few aspects of the school that could be improved upon. Because of its small size, the course offerings are limited, as are the research opportunities for science majors. Another source of dissatisfaction with the school is that the student body is not as academically engaged as I would have expected.

By transferring, I would like to attend an institution in which I can explore my passion for science in depth amongst a student body that wholeheartedly wants to learn, and is faced with challenges that will really test their abilities. I want to become ingrained in a community that is involved both in and out of the classroom; one that consists of an eclectic variety of students with a wide range of interests. I hope to be granted admission to a school with renowned academics and a multitude of course offerings that can provide a topnotch education, as well as a fulfilling college experience. I believe that transferring would allow me to not only benefit from a new environment, but contribute to it as well... (not done yet, I will add in a brief conclusion about how I will contribute to the school as well).

I am applying to reach schools, with SAT scores in the low to mid 600s, and a HS GPA of 3.4
After my first semester of college (which was a 3.33) I have gotten straight As since.
I am really trying to emphasize how much I have changed, and that I will continue getting straight As throughout my college career. I hope that they can take this into consideration and give me the benefit of the doubt.

Please help me out guys, I'm a huge underdog in this situation.

OP jpsmyth 7 / 21  
Jan 1, 2013   #2
I am also going to change the title to something more positive
noneil 2 / 4  
Jan 2, 2013   #3
I think you did a really great job
What ever colleges you're applying to will definitely see your want to change for the better and how you're passionate about studying medicine.

I didn't find anything that needed changing
OP jpsmyth 7 / 21  
Jan 3, 2013   #4
thanks! is there anything else? syntax errors or whatnot


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