So, I was planning to continue with my application to umass Lowell and umass Amherst, as an international transfer student. And, for some reason, I was very stressed about submitting everything that I forgot to do a spell-check. So yes, my application has LOADS of spelling mistakes and typos as you can see below.. I think that this essay makes me look ridiculous and it makes me seem like I don't care about this whole thing. I can't think of anything to do right now but to just sit and cry about the stupid and terrible mistake I did. I am thinking this is beyond repair and I don't know if I should continue. What's your opinion?
Prompt:
Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (1000 character maximum).
Response:
To me, success is the ability to reach the goals that you truly want to reach. For a long time, I
thought my true goals were to be rich and have a great job until I came to the realization that I
needed things that are beyond the materialistic. I have always lived in my home country with my
single mother, who is a strong, selfless and supportive woman who felt the need to protect me as
I was her only child, and while I am grateful for that, I felt the need to gain my independance and
get out of my comfort zone. I was hesitant about transfering to a university in USA because I
wasn't sure if I can live alone and take full responsibility for myself. I talked to my dad who is
the most independant man I've seen, and asked "How do I know if I can do this if I have never
done it before?" and he said "You refer to your performance in simmilar past situations" and I
replied "But I haven't done anything like this before". And then it just struck me. If your answer
does not exist in facts, then you should search for it elsewhere, and I searched in my own self.
Do I think I can do this? I realized that only I had the answer to my question, and now I was
positive that I am making the right decision.
Finding my true interests and thus choosing a major was challanging. I never took it lightly
because I do not want to be just another person studying a something. I want to be great at what I
do, and while my current uniiversity is a place where I was challanged to work hard, think
critically and enhance my social skills, I decided to travel to the USA because I believe it offers
the greatest education at my decipline and I am confident that I will have all the tools that I need
to be successful.
I consider myself a blessed and lucky person who has the most supportive and loving family,
and while I am grateful for that, I believe this is the time when I should take responsibility for
myself, achieve my independance and follow my dreams, and that is what I hope to achieve.
Prompt:
Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (1000 character maximum).
Response:
To me, success is the ability to reach the goals that you truly want to reach. For a long time, I
thought my true goals were to be rich and have a great job until I came to the realization that I
needed things that are beyond the materialistic. I have always lived in my home country with my
single mother, who is a strong, selfless and supportive woman who felt the need to protect me as
I was her only child, and while I am grateful for that, I felt the need to gain my independance and
get out of my comfort zone. I was hesitant about transfering to a university in USA because I
wasn't sure if I can live alone and take full responsibility for myself. I talked to my dad who is
the most independant man I've seen, and asked "How do I know if I can do this if I have never
done it before?" and he said "You refer to your performance in simmilar past situations" and I
replied "But I haven't done anything like this before". And then it just struck me. If your answer
does not exist in facts, then you should search for it elsewhere, and I searched in my own self.
Do I think I can do this? I realized that only I had the answer to my question, and now I was
positive that I am making the right decision.
Finding my true interests and thus choosing a major was challanging. I never took it lightly
because I do not want to be just another person studying a something. I want to be great at what I
do, and while my current uniiversity is a place where I was challanged to work hard, think
critically and enhance my social skills, I decided to travel to the USA because I believe it offers
the greatest education at my decipline and I am confident that I will have all the tools that I need
to be successful.
I consider myself a blessed and lucky person who has the most supportive and loving family,
and while I am grateful for that, I believe this is the time when I should take responsibility for
myself, achieve my independance and follow my dreams, and that is what I hope to achieve.
