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I am not your typical Indian; UC Essay Prompt #1


Srini456 1 / 1 1  
Oct 23, 2013   #1
Please look over my UC Essay #1! Rough Draft, so it has come grammar mistakes. Please give me any input on how i should change it, i feel as if i brought up too many things in it.

It was sophomore year of high school where I realized, that I don't lead the stereotypical Indian life, and that I am not your typical Indian. I am first generation Asian American to live in the United States. My parents moved from India, in order to lead a better life, and give more opportunities to my brother and me. Being the older brother isn't very fun, my parents kept telling me that I have to set a good example for my brother, and that I should study hard now and then I can play all I want when I grow up. So basically I was that kid that had a busy academic schedule, provided by my parents, and this didn't change until my sophomore year of high school.

Sophmore year was a watershed moment in my life, because this was the year I joined Student Government. My parents were completely against this decision, telling me that I should be in a more "academic" class then Student Government, and that I will waste my time in this class. Eventually I convinced them to let me stay in the class, but I can't say I was treated with the best respect with this descion. Student Government changed me in more ways then I could count. It provided me with one of life's greatest treasures, Friends. These friends helped me to get where I am today.

Now I can't really give all the credit to my friends. It was also my parents who also eventually started to support whatever decision I took. End of junior year, I took the decision to run for ASB President of Folsom High School. Surprisingly, I had not only my friends supporting me, but also my parents full support. In the end, I won and I became the youngest and first Asian ASB President of Folsom High School for the 2013-2014 school year.

To this day I am grateful for the person I have become and I do not regret any of my descioons, because they all led me to the content and happy person I am today.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Oct 24, 2013   #2
It's always good to include your prompt so that we know what it requires from you and therefore can align our comments accordingly.

I should study hard now and then I can play all I want when I grow up

I should study hard first and then only I can enjoy the life I want when I grow up.
So basically I was that kid thatwho had a busystrict academic schedule,...

My parents were completely against this decision, telling me that I should be in a more "academic" class then Student Government,

My parents were dead against this decision and kept telling me that I should set my priorities for academics.
OP Srini456 1 / 1 1  
Oct 24, 2013   #3
Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.

Sorry here it is!


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