Hi, the topic I chose for my commonapp essay was-
Indicate a person who has had a significant influence on you, and describe that influence
I've grown up believing that the love of a family is life's greatest blessing. Instead I've realized that we're the most naïve when we are young. My parents, without a question, have showered me with love and tried their best to guide me in the right direction, but unfortunately they're not the only ones who've influenced me greatly. My uncle, a wealthy high status man, has received his current wellbeing by manipulating, lying and cheating to his closest ones. Although those slyly techniques weren't used towards me, I've witnessed enough to learn from its harmful consequences.
As I lay in bed, almost half asleep, I hear my father's harsh words directed towards my uncle. Maybe I wasn't meant to hear this, but I felt I had a right to know. What I heard that night truly changed my positive outlook on my uncle till this day. The man I looked at as genuinely giving and noble for helping out my dad by providing him with a job for the time being, had another motive in his actions. Hearing that he took advantage of my dad by making him work past his capability and skimming him of his earned money, I recognized the harshness of humanity. From his wrongdoings I'm fortunate enough to learn from his negative characteristics by gaining a perspective of what not to do. I now have a new profound respect with whomever I interact with as that's the same courtesy I'd wanted to be treated with. Additionally, I've learned honesty rather than cheating and lying gets you farther in life.
Even though my dad was unfortunate with his only option of working for my uncle, he tried his best searching for new employment. When he decided to stop relying on others, and rather start his own business, he not only found happiness but also opened my eyes to reality. As my family supported him through his new journey, my uncle attempted to discourage him to quit. Seeing him fight against his hurtful words and succeeding, my dad showed me his strength which helped me find my own. In life there will always be people who abash your achievements and I've seen that the only way to get past it is to disregard their words and find courage to step past them. I plan to bring these traits with myself to a new institution where I will determinedly pursue my dreams in search for my own happiness.
Like the once eminent Peter McWilliams had said, "The road to positivity is strewn with the abandoned vehicles of the faint- hearted." The hurtful experiences I've been through gave me strength to be who I am today. Although these happenings have been ill-fated, I thank my uncle for displaying the image I for one never want to see in the mirror.
I decided to choose a negative influence I had and to make into something postive. Any criticism, comments, edits will be appreciated! :) Still thinking of an ending btw. Thanks!
Indicate a person who has had a significant influence on you, and describe that influence
I've grown up believing that the love of a family is life's greatest blessing. Instead I've realized that we're the most naïve when we are young. My parents, without a question, have showered me with love and tried their best to guide me in the right direction, but unfortunately they're not the only ones who've influenced me greatly. My uncle, a wealthy high status man, has received his current wellbeing by manipulating, lying and cheating to his closest ones. Although those slyly techniques weren't used towards me, I've witnessed enough to learn from its harmful consequences.
As I lay in bed, almost half asleep, I hear my father's harsh words directed towards my uncle. Maybe I wasn't meant to hear this, but I felt I had a right to know. What I heard that night truly changed my positive outlook on my uncle till this day. The man I looked at as genuinely giving and noble for helping out my dad by providing him with a job for the time being, had another motive in his actions. Hearing that he took advantage of my dad by making him work past his capability and skimming him of his earned money, I recognized the harshness of humanity. From his wrongdoings I'm fortunate enough to learn from his negative characteristics by gaining a perspective of what not to do. I now have a new profound respect with whomever I interact with as that's the same courtesy I'd wanted to be treated with. Additionally, I've learned honesty rather than cheating and lying gets you farther in life.
Even though my dad was unfortunate with his only option of working for my uncle, he tried his best searching for new employment. When he decided to stop relying on others, and rather start his own business, he not only found happiness but also opened my eyes to reality. As my family supported him through his new journey, my uncle attempted to discourage him to quit. Seeing him fight against his hurtful words and succeeding, my dad showed me his strength which helped me find my own. In life there will always be people who abash your achievements and I've seen that the only way to get past it is to disregard their words and find courage to step past them. I plan to bring these traits with myself to a new institution where I will determinedly pursue my dreams in search for my own happiness.
Like the once eminent Peter McWilliams had said, "The road to positivity is strewn with the abandoned vehicles of the faint- hearted." The hurtful experiences I've been through gave me strength to be who I am today. Although these happenings have been ill-fated, I thank my uncle for displaying the image I for one never want to see in the mirror.
I decided to choose a negative influence I had and to make into something postive. Any criticism, comments, edits will be appreciated! :) Still thinking of an ending btw. Thanks!
