"understanding and appreciation of the diversity of our world" - Colby Supplement

Prompt: Briefly discuss your reasons for applying to Colby

When choosing a college, the first thing I considered as the most important aspect of any college is the way it celebrates diversity; diversity in cultural and religious backgrounds, personality, political views and so on. Studying in an international school for almost 8 years now, I have developed a dynamic understanding and appreciation of the diversity of our world. Such an environment has made me realize that a melting pot of races result in a melting pot of opinions and ideas that creates a vibrant and energetic community. You could say diversity has become an inspiring addiction for me; from music performances and artistic displays to presentations and essays in class, I am continuously amazed by how differently one can express one's self, and how strongly one's cultural background can influence their various forms of expression. Such an exposure has in turn allowed me to be more critical and creative in my work, and encouraged me to look through other people's perspectives rather than just my own. Thus, I chose Colby not just because I was impressed by it's statistically high percentage of international students, but also because of how Colby embraces such a diverse community, and I have to say for me now after those unforgettable 8 years, there is no turning back. should I say instead: There's no turning back for me", or "i can't turn back"?

I see alot of loopholes which I don't know how to fix T_T but I hope my argument makes sense. It's not per say a very "artistic" response...so do leave any comments you can. Thanks!

When choosingI choose a college, the first thing I considered as the most important aspect of any college is the way it celebrates diversity;, diversity in cultural and religious backgrounds, personality, political views and so on.

Studyinghaving studied in an international school for almost 8 years now, I have developed a dynamic understanding and appreciation of the diversity of our world.

[You could say diversity has become an inspiring addiction for me]I think u should change this clause ; from music performances and artistic displays to presentations and essays in class, I am continuously amazed by how differently one can express one's self, and how strongly one's cultural background can influence theirhis various forms of expression.

there are a lot of essays about this kind of supplement, so u can read them to improve your idea. Most international student don't know much about the colleges they choose

I have a great idea for this! Look at how much stronger it is if I cut the unnecessary words from the intro:
...the first thing I considered as the most important aspect of any college is was the way it celebrates...

If you compare it to an addiction, you have to describe some kind of activity that you do over and over and cannot get enough of.

I recomment eight instead of 8.

should I say instead: There's no turning back for me", or "i can't turn back"?--I like it the way you wrote it, there's no turning back. Yet, it is a cliche. Also, you might find inspiration when you look at it later today, and you might think of an excellent thought you want to leave in the reader's mind, something better than "there's no turning back."

:-)