Hi there, I was wondering if anyone could provide me with advice in regards to one of my UBC application essays. The question was,
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How would your family, friends, and/or members of your community describe you? If possible, please include something about yourself that you are most proud of and why. (maximum 250 words)"
here is my answer:
My past physical weakness and my brother. These two components of my life define my character. A few years ago , my physical characteristics were an aspect I was self conscious of as I was very lanky. However, when I was fifteen years old, I decided to change myself. I started going to train at the gym every single day by lifting weights. Slowly but surely, my body changed and I became muscular through dedication. In addition to this, my self confidence improved. Through my transformation, I would describe myself as an individual who strives to make change and defeat hardships regardless of disadvantages. I am proud of my transformation because it taught me the importance of ambition in order to succeed in achieving goals.
If I was to tell you who I was, the traits I would tell you about myself have partly derived from being around my brother. He was born with autism which is a learning disability. However, he showed me many significant life lessons. My brother showed me true optimism. Regardless of unfortunate circumstances, he always exudes happiness through the smaller givings. I would describe myself as an optimist from being around him as I always work with maximal effort regardless of the position I am in just like him. My family would describe me as a caring and considerate individual through how I take care of my brother. My friends and other peers would describe me as a resilient individual who handles the hardships of life head on without failure.
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Tell us about who you are.
How would your family, friends, and/or members of your community describe you? If possible, please include something about yourself that you are most proud of and why. (maximum 250 words)"
here is my answer:
My past physical weakness and my brother. These two components of my life define my character. A few years ago , my physical characteristics were an aspect I was self conscious of as I was very lanky. However, when I was fifteen years old, I decided to change myself. I started going to train at the gym every single day by lifting weights. Slowly but surely, my body changed and I became muscular through dedication. In addition to this, my self confidence improved. Through my transformation, I would describe myself as an individual who strives to make change and defeat hardships regardless of disadvantages. I am proud of my transformation because it taught me the importance of ambition in order to succeed in achieving goals.
If I was to tell you who I was, the traits I would tell you about myself have partly derived from being around my brother. He was born with autism which is a learning disability. However, he showed me many significant life lessons. My brother showed me true optimism. Regardless of unfortunate circumstances, he always exudes happiness through the smaller givings. I would describe myself as an optimist from being around him as I always work with maximal effort regardless of the position I am in just like him. My family would describe me as a caring and considerate individual through how I take care of my brother. My friends and other peers would describe me as a resilient individual who handles the hardships of life head on without failure.