Is it all right to finish my apps like right before 16th?
I'm worried...
haha... =_=
U.Mich essays! issue of concern and diversity question essay help
#1 Share an experience through which you have gained respect for intellectual, social, or cultural differences. Comment on how your personal experiences and achievements would contribute to the diversity of the University of Michigan.
When I was to begin my life in an international school which has various people from twenty different countries about three years ago, I thought I would have hard time adjusting to the new environment; I thought people would think differently so that they won't understand each other easily. Different from what I expected, I saw myself melting into the new society, which had a united culture; a culture which people in the school has created: the "Woodstock" culture. First it seemed odd when white girls were eating in Indian style, mixing rice, curd and curry in one plate; also they would tell me, 'Sarah, just use your hands! It is harder to eat chicken with spoon and fork." Now I find it enjoyable to adapt things that are different from what I am used to. Speaking Hindi in local markets, teaching Korean to friends, oiling hair, eating spicy Tibetan pork with rice, having a dance party in a room, learning yoga before sleeping, and singing with a friend playing guitar were the activities I had never done before with my Korean friends; I was able to do these because I have met many kinds of people from various countries and various cultures. Accepting difference of others made my life richer and more interesting. I think I became a more opened person who is inspired by the difference between myself and a person and tries to find what I could learn from him or her; this made me become a person who has mixed culture in herself. I think I could introduce the new perspective of mixing-cultures into University of Michigan.
#2 Discuss an issue of local concern. Why is this issue important to you? How do you think it should be addressed?
Should people come back from their migration to their hometown? Villages in India are in danger of vanishing; the westernization of people made some not to return to their uncivilized villages. People leave, ignoring their own traditions and the fact that their hometowns might disappear. This issue is dealt by Jaunpuri Villages Film Project, which is run by school documentary team. In the beginning, I joined it because I was fascinated by the idea of creating a professional documentary, but as I became more into the project, I realized that I am also one of the examples of the mass exodus from Korea. I started reflecting on myself and my country.
Many Koreans immigrate to English speaking countries and settle there. Korean education is one major reason of it; it is oppressive and not as effective compared to students' hard work. I transferred to my current school, an international school in India which runs American system, because my father was posted to a branch in India. He was posted back to Korea in two years, but I wanted to continue my studies in the school because I liked the education system better. The virtue of the American education system is that it allows students to study what they want, slowly and deeply; most students can manage to study by themselves. Also it encourages students to express their opinions in class and expand their perspectives by talking to others. In contrast, Koreans are encouraged to memorize the answers and they do not get the chances to express themselves. Also, lectures are held in phenomenally short time spans, too short to enjoy them or even to thoroughly comprehend them. It is an accepted fact that students aren't able to work on school work themselves; the Korean government once tried to ban all the private tutors but it wasn't hampered by its actions.
I remember always being bored in my previous Korean public school. But in my current school, I engaged in studies more actively, and I enjoyed all the classes. Different style in teaching made me indulged in each subjects and I could also discover that I am a creative person; in Korean high schools, students are bound to studies; they cannot do other activities. In my current school, I got chances to do creative works such as organizing school assemblies as the school's Assembly Planning Head, making promotional videos to present to the school, working on talent show decorations and organization as a class, being a designer of the school yearbook, and so on.
The number of people who are moving to States, Canada or Australia is increasing. One day, we might be worrying about Korea being deserted by intelligent people, just like Indian villagers. However, we have conditions to become better; if we adapt virtues of American education system, the improvement in education circumstances will attract migrants from other countries. If the education slows down, and lets the students learn the essence of what they have to learn thoroughly themselves in school, express what they think and discuss amongst themselves, and discover what they like to do, students won't have to suffer by putting so much energy unnecessarily.
The second essay is the one I put a week ago.. I made it shorter, (it became half length of the last one) and I think it's more to the point.
I think I've made many grammar mistakes...
any feedback will be greatly appreciated.
Thank You!!!
thank you so much for reading...:)))
I'm worried...
haha... =_=
U.Mich essays! issue of concern and diversity question essay help
#1 Share an experience through which you have gained respect for intellectual, social, or cultural differences. Comment on how your personal experiences and achievements would contribute to the diversity of the University of Michigan.
When I was to begin my life in an international school which has various people from twenty different countries about three years ago, I thought I would have hard time adjusting to the new environment; I thought people would think differently so that they won't understand each other easily. Different from what I expected, I saw myself melting into the new society, which had a united culture; a culture which people in the school has created: the "Woodstock" culture. First it seemed odd when white girls were eating in Indian style, mixing rice, curd and curry in one plate; also they would tell me, 'Sarah, just use your hands! It is harder to eat chicken with spoon and fork." Now I find it enjoyable to adapt things that are different from what I am used to. Speaking Hindi in local markets, teaching Korean to friends, oiling hair, eating spicy Tibetan pork with rice, having a dance party in a room, learning yoga before sleeping, and singing with a friend playing guitar were the activities I had never done before with my Korean friends; I was able to do these because I have met many kinds of people from various countries and various cultures. Accepting difference of others made my life richer and more interesting. I think I became a more opened person who is inspired by the difference between myself and a person and tries to find what I could learn from him or her; this made me become a person who has mixed culture in herself. I think I could introduce the new perspective of mixing-cultures into University of Michigan.
#2 Discuss an issue of local concern. Why is this issue important to you? How do you think it should be addressed?
Should people come back from their migration to their hometown? Villages in India are in danger of vanishing; the westernization of people made some not to return to their uncivilized villages. People leave, ignoring their own traditions and the fact that their hometowns might disappear. This issue is dealt by Jaunpuri Villages Film Project, which is run by school documentary team. In the beginning, I joined it because I was fascinated by the idea of creating a professional documentary, but as I became more into the project, I realized that I am also one of the examples of the mass exodus from Korea. I started reflecting on myself and my country.
Many Koreans immigrate to English speaking countries and settle there. Korean education is one major reason of it; it is oppressive and not as effective compared to students' hard work. I transferred to my current school, an international school in India which runs American system, because my father was posted to a branch in India. He was posted back to Korea in two years, but I wanted to continue my studies in the school because I liked the education system better. The virtue of the American education system is that it allows students to study what they want, slowly and deeply; most students can manage to study by themselves. Also it encourages students to express their opinions in class and expand their perspectives by talking to others. In contrast, Koreans are encouraged to memorize the answers and they do not get the chances to express themselves. Also, lectures are held in phenomenally short time spans, too short to enjoy them or even to thoroughly comprehend them. It is an accepted fact that students aren't able to work on school work themselves; the Korean government once tried to ban all the private tutors but it wasn't hampered by its actions.
I remember always being bored in my previous Korean public school. But in my current school, I engaged in studies more actively, and I enjoyed all the classes. Different style in teaching made me indulged in each subjects and I could also discover that I am a creative person; in Korean high schools, students are bound to studies; they cannot do other activities. In my current school, I got chances to do creative works such as organizing school assemblies as the school's Assembly Planning Head, making promotional videos to present to the school, working on talent show decorations and organization as a class, being a designer of the school yearbook, and so on.
The number of people who are moving to States, Canada or Australia is increasing. One day, we might be worrying about Korea being deserted by intelligent people, just like Indian villagers. However, we have conditions to become better; if we adapt virtues of American education system, the improvement in education circumstances will attract migrants from other countries. If the education slows down, and lets the students learn the essence of what they have to learn thoroughly themselves in school, express what they think and discuss amongst themselves, and discover what they like to do, students won't have to suffer by putting so much energy unnecessarily.
The second essay is the one I put a week ago.. I made it shorter, (it became half length of the last one) and I think it's more to the point.
I think I've made many grammar mistakes...
any feedback will be greatly appreciated.
Thank You!!!
thank you so much for reading...:)))