Hi everyone, this is my common app short answer and can someone help me proofread it? I really have no ideas how to shorten it down since I am exceeding the limit by 50 words...
Please give your comments and me shorten it. THANKS A LOT!!
Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (150 words or fewer).
My leadership potential was sparked during my freshman year at Southeast University, China, where I joined English Corner and was elected the vice Minister. At first I realized that, as a leader, the first thing one should do is to build trust among team members; I held parties for my club through which everyone became united. During the preparation period for an activity, I worked on designing a plan, taking successive team meetings in which we discussed how this activity should flow. Also, I was responsible for instructing new team members to handle difficult tasks like hosting and decorating. During the activities I was in charge of directing each team member, and it was through solving emergent issues that my ingenuity as a leader was largely enhanced. Among our club activities stood out an English song singing competition-Musical Night in which we invited both students and faculties to attend. It turned out to be the most successful club activity I had ever organized.
Without a doubt, my leadership experience in English Corner at Southeast University was well worth. Not only did I obtain the essential qualities of a good leader: dedication, reliability and productivity, but also my enthusiasm and knowledge as a leader was significantly enriched.
All feedbacks are welcome, thanks!!
Please give your comments and me shorten it. THANKS A LOT!!
Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (150 words or fewer).
My leadership potential was sparked during my freshman year at Southeast University, China, where I joined English Corner and was elected the vice Minister. At first I realized that, as a leader, the first thing one should do is to build trust among team members; I held parties for my club through which everyone became united. During the preparation period for an activity, I worked on designing a plan, taking successive team meetings in which we discussed how this activity should flow. Also, I was responsible for instructing new team members to handle difficult tasks like hosting and decorating. During the activities I was in charge of directing each team member, and it was through solving emergent issues that my ingenuity as a leader was largely enhanced. Among our club activities stood out an English song singing competition-Musical Night in which we invited both students and faculties to attend. It turned out to be the most successful club activity I had ever organized.
Without a doubt, my leadership experience in English Corner at Southeast University was well worth. Not only did I obtain the essential qualities of a good leader: dedication, reliability and productivity, but also my enthusiasm and knowledge as a leader was significantly enriched.
All feedbacks are welcome, thanks!!