jmadrigales 2 / 2 Oct 28, 2010 #1This is the Common App short answer question. I'm not really sure if I should use this yet but thank you in advance for your comments and suggestions! :)I felt the scorching sun beating down on my burnt back. I heard my boss say, "Jessie only five hundred more cows to go!", already 10 hours into my shift. Even though it was grueling, I learned a lot from working at El Oro Cattle Feeders. I learned the value of hard work. Everything can't be handed to you in life. You must go out there and obtain it yourself. I also learned how to work with people different than myself. I believe this is very important because this is how it will be at a university. However the most important thing I learned from this job is that I want to become more than just a person who works at a fast food restaurant or who works in the fields. I want to go above and beyond even my own expectations. College is the first vital step.
Michael48304 8 / 31 Oct 28, 2010 #2Already ten hours into my shift, I heard my boss say...Everythingwill not be handed to you in life. You must go out there and obtain it yourself.... very important because this isthe atmosphere at a university. However, the most important thing I learned from this job is that I want to become more than just a person who works at a fast food restaurant employee or someone who works in the fields.College is the first vital step in that process .Good start! Keep working and editing. Add more details if you have word count space.
OP jmadrigales 2 / 2 Oct 29, 2010 #3Thank you very much for your corrections! But yeah its only supposed to be a max of 150 words
donkeykong98732 / Oct 30, 2010 #4I like the essay! It shows how you grew and learned an important lesson!Two corrections are:"I felt the scorching sun beat down on my burnt back.""Even though the work was grueling..."It was ambiguous.Overall, very good! Best of luck to you! (: