What factors have led you to consider Macalester College? Why do you believe it may be a good match, and what do you believe you can add to the Mac community, academically and personally?
Feel free to draw on past experiences, and use concrete examples to support your perspective. Additional writing samples (e.g., class papers or creative writing) are welcomed as supplements, but are not substitutes for either essay.
I am a curious person. The workings of the human mind, the evolution of mankind, the mechanism of the business sector, soothing properties of music, the information technology advancements; they all fascinate me. I am in constant search for quenching my thirst for knowledge, and I tend to grab any opportunities that may allow me to learn more. So, I have made numerous attempts, both successful and unsuccessful, to get closer to my areas of interests. I have tried my luck with an internship at a banking institution, a job at a multimedia agency, courses in music and inspection of copious research articles, but have yet to completely fulfill my curiosity. I am still in a learning process, and I believe Macalester can help me in my endeavors.
I chose Macalester because I want to acquire more knowledge and share and discuss my learning with like minded individuals. I believe Macalester will be the perfect grooming place to make me a more knowledgeable and rational person. The vibrant and diverse community of Macalester appeals to me. So, I think Macalester is a great place for me to grow.
In addition to acquiring knowledge, I believe I can also contribute my skills and intellect to the community. I am well versed in the areas of computer science. I am an intermediate guitar player and singer. I regularly enjoy and take part in community service programs as well as career oriented internships or jobs. So, I feel that I can contribute these skills as well as build them in the process. I would love to join Macalester's unique internship programs and take part in the club activities. Thus, I believe Macalester is a good match for me.
Do i come out as arrogant or mechanical? is this sincere enough? Please give feedback :)
some of my suggestions:
I am in constant search for any opportunities that may help quench my thirst for knowledge and allow me to learn more
Therefore , I have made numerous attempts, both successful and unsuccessful, to get closer to my potential areas of interests. (I assume you have not found it?)
So, I think Macalester is a great place for me to grow. I would omit this sentence and maybe put it at the end of your essay.
Maybe a little more elaboration on how Macalester will help you in your endeavor and how its diverse community appeals to you would be a good idea. It just seems a bit too general.
Good luck with your application! Would appreciate if you help out with mine too :-)
