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YALE SHORT ANSWERS - THE MOST IMPORTANT THINGS IN LIFE I LEARNED.



barry 4 / 15  
Dec 29, 2016   #1
Please suggest me your opinions.
If possible try to tear it down.

Why do these areas appeal to you?


I feel satisfied every day when I get off hands from a computer and believe that I am going to make a difference. I feel Computer Science and Mechanical as the ground breaking combination for changing the world in the way I believe. I see computer science as a formula for some of the unsolved problems in the technological world. And I was always interested in learning how people think, act, react and interact in different situations.

When I see a piano, I see bunch of keys and a box of wood but when Beethoven saw it he made sense that he can just play. What I wanted to say is when it comes to stuff like computers I can just play.

Why Yale?


When I was searching for universities with the best undergraduate research opportunities which would help me on the project I have been working, I found a few prestigious universities in the world. And When I came to know about Yale's residential system which is a very unique advantage, I felt like removing a thought of missing a family and was very excited to be a part of another. Yale's financial aid, research opportunities and faculty relationship with the students gave me a confidence that I can get successful result in my work and career with the support of a new family.

Genuine Excitement:


When I was 9, my neighbors bought a weird television with a board of alphabets connected to it for his son Abhi. Abhi called me to show me his new television which he named it as computer. After a few days we were able to operate it with the help of his father.

My enthusiasm for computers grew and his father was very happy to see me passionate about computers, So he taught me everything he got. It was summer and Abhi's family went on a trip. So I asked my parents to buy me a computer, but they convinced me by explaining our financial circumstances.

So I decided to save some money for a computer. When Abhi's family returned, I spent most of my free time with his father learning about computers and programming. When I was 12 finally one day I was able to buy a computer with my saved money. I was so excited to see my new computer because it took me 742 days to make my dream a reality. That moment taught me the importance of having hope, and also made me realize that I will succeed not immediately but definitely at some point of life.

THANK YOU

astrum72 2 / 8  
Dec 29, 2016   #2
I like the overall idea of your essays. I don't think you should mention Yale's financial aid because it is not something that is really unique that the university.

Also,
When I see a piano, I see ONLY A bunch of keys and a box of wood but when Beethoven saw it, IT made sense that he can just play. WHEN IT COMES TO COMPUTRES,I can just play.
OP barry 4 / 15  
Dec 29, 2016   #3
@astrum72
Thank you for editing, I will definitely replace that sentence.


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