Aadvantages and disadvantages of sending children work or travel just be;IELTS

some people think that school graduates
should travel or work for a period of time
instead of going directly to study at
university.

discuss the advantages and disadvantages
of both approaches

Nowadays,many changes have taken place
in the theam of curriculam due to the
advancements in lifestyle. it is often
argued that, after finishing
schooling,young people must go to do
some job or a journey without directly
getting into a uniersity life. in this essay i
would like to listdown some advantages
and disadvantages concerning the above
mentioned argument.

To begin with the positive out comes of
students taking a break before joining
unversity. Firstly, by doing some job for a
short period can make a child more
concious about the value of money ,
punctuaity and team work. this can
influence postively on his/her higher
studies. Going to a journey for a short
span makes the person to acquire a
better perspective of the world. which
also improves the confidence,
communication skills in them.

However, there are many cons can be
pointed out regarding this argument. first
point is that, lagging a period of time in
studies can influence negatively on the
future of a child especially in the era of
extreme rat race. in addition to that
going for a journey at a young age alone is
not a safe practice and there might be a
chance for ending in big troubes such as
burglary, bad peer group influence and
stress. working enviroment can influence
ones further studies badly. there by
children loose their interest in studies.
finally,it is difficult for a teenager to
endure heavy work pressure at his
immature age.

in conclusion, even if a child is sent to a
job or travel before higher studies brings
more potential. it also creates many
drawbacks..so in my opinion it is better
to fullfill children's academic carrier
instead imposing a job or travel alone.
lets hope all work better in near future.

theme of curriculum?
Well, I think your topic means something different. It's not about the curriculum, but about the gap year. Curriculum is about the subjects and moduels that are taught in school. This is something more to do with the education system. So you need to align this opeining sentence more with the topic. :)

Hai..

You have some good points..
Keep it up..

Tessy.
Looking forward to see your more essays.