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The ability of children to comprehension of a foreign language is much better at the primary school


SarlindaDS_27 42 / 52 5  
Nov 29, 2016   #1
Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

It is believed that to start the ability of children in comprehension of a foreign language better during at the primary school rather than at secondary school. This essay will discuss the advantages of the case where the children would be better take the foreign language subject since in the early education stage, and then will discuss why the advantages outweigh the drawbacks.

Today, additional subject in the academic curriculum such as a foreign language competency had been urgent for children as the student in their schools. So, it should be preparation since in the early of academic stages. The several reasons as the background of this decision included the self-ready condition of the child and the optimum of brain capability in earlier aged. For instance, according to the research of Children Developmental Psychology in 2013 had revealed that the range aged from 3 to 11 years old is the best moment for increasing the language comprehension skill of the child because in this stage, the child brain still easier to code anything of language pattern into long term memory which is located in right side of the brain. This study resulted that more than 22 % of the children who studying a foreign language in primary school have been more potential became the expert of the language in 18 years old rather than another child who don't study since in the basic schools.

However. Several facts may be there in the real life where occasionally the child are not ready enough for learning a strange language in their early age. Several children may be difficult for following the language which not their mother language. Moreover, several schools sometimes not too strict with their curriculum of foreign language competency. Thus, some students become aware of their purpose to study a foreign language when they had already sat on the higher degree. In fact, this condition had been more difficult for them to be more adaptable and memorable the new vocabulary of the foreign tongue.

All in all, it should be better if the curriculum of a foreign language had been available since in the primary school for improving the child comprehension since earlier. (360 words)

akbarmappiare 31 / 469 275  
Nov 29, 2016   #2
Hi Miss Sarlinda.
Woow... Your words up to more than 300 words. It is important to focus on the quality rather than the quantity. Actually, there were some sentences to diminish the number of your words. Keep in your mind you are gonna fight the time. Manage your time as soon as possible. Besides that, it can make readers bored to review this.

then will discuss why the advantages ...

I think you are supposed to remove this because of not giving the significant effect.

Today, additional subject in the academic curriculum ...

There were many hackneyed sentences. You should directly explain why the foreign language is supposed to be taught first time in the primary school. Control your prompts to achieve task response and not to exaggerate.

This study resulted that more than

You need to add the linking word to make your move smoother. Please, you involve the word "besides that"
Besides that, this study......

According to your second body paragraph. Your flow was not enough good. I have to pause to get what you mind in your essay. Its reason is because you did not harness the linking words as well as possible to guide the readers.

a strange language in their early age. Several children may be

The sentences above I have not found its relation. You should add a conjunction to make it relates each other. To make sure, It is better you reread your sentences before you upload to check your flow closely.

Please, you add sentences in the conclusion paragraph. The good paragraph consists of at least 3 sentences. You can include suggestions for some elements to complete your conclusion.

Keep Writing
GOOD LUCK
Dioba 68 / 104 7  
Nov 29, 2016   #3
Hi, there are several advice for you.
1.... education stage, and then will discuss why the advantages outweigh the drawbacks. ---> where is your strong statement for overview? i suggest you in introductory sentence, you should be insert your personal view to make more clear statement(ex: in my point of view, the merits outweigh the negative impacts) .

2.competency had beenbecome or more urgent for children as ...
3.it should be preparationprepare since in the early of initial academic stages.phase
4.This study resultedAs a result , more than 22 % (...) children who don't do not (academic purpose) study since in ...
Beauty17 56 / 88 5  
Nov 29, 2016   #4
Hallo indah.. here my notes for you..

This essay will discuss the advantages (...) outweigh the drawbacks. >>> If you want to get higher score, better you explain what the advantage and its disadvantage briefly in your introduction. From this way, you will attract the reader to read more your essay.

Today, additional subject in [...] the early of academic stages. (You need to the point in the first line in focusing what will you explain)

I realize that you put your advantages as your point of you in the first paragraph then your disadvantages in the second. However, as far as i know, you must put your point of you in the second body if you agree that the benefits outweigh it drawbacks.

good luck


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