ACADEMIC TASK 1- COMPARISON OF PIE CHARTS (leisure activities in U.S.A)

These pie charts compare the percentage of most popular leisure activities in U.S.A. in years 1999 and 2009. It is clear that walking and jogging together constitute almost 35 % of the leisure activities in these years.

In year 1999 and 2009, walking is the most popular leisure activity comprising 29 % and 31 % of activities respectively. The next most important leisure activity is participation in sports such as soccer, swimming, bicycling and aerobics. These four activities contribute to a total of 51% in year 1999 and 47 % in year 2009.

It is seen that popularity of swimming doubled from 9% to 18% during these years. Popularity of aerobics decreased dramatically from 13% in 1999 to 4% in 2009. Another interesting fact to be noticed is that yoga completely disappeared in 2009 as compared to 1999. Moreover, weight lifting became popular in 2009 comprising 10% of all activities

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Your approach for this task needs improvement. You need to have an intro, overview and body paras (ideally two paras with details). Let's take your intro;


... the purpose of intro is to introduce the image (can be a graph, chart, table, diagram or combination of them) to the reader. You should include time frames if there are any. So, the second part of your intro is not really should not be there and that's why I striked it off.

Then comes the Overview which gives a broad idea about what the image presents. Here you discuss the most obvious trends/ observations. For example;
Soccer had been the most popular leisure activity from 1999 to 2009 and its popularity has grown over the years. Jogging, aerobics, yoga and bicycling had been among the least popular leisure activities.

Hi Dumi
Many Thanks
This is a very valuable feedback for me
I will improve on the flaws and write another task 1 report shortly
Thanks again